It may be good, I dont know.

I'm distracted by the horrible (and continual) mis-spelling of the word "through". Please edit to include proper spelling and I will think of continuing to read.

it's about time y'know. but it was definately worth the wait y'know? so yea... great job!

*Nearly cries* Aw! That was so lovely! I'm a right sucker for moving endings, especially if they involve family reunions and the simplicity of the one-word-ending gave it just the right atmosphere :D excellent! What I also liked was the transition from Bealzabub's innocence to her old age in two chapters so you could really see the contrast as she appears to completely change (I'm not saying that if you put one shots in there it wouldn't be as good though cuz I'm fascinated to see what happened to her just that this way is equally as cool).

yay! *claps* i shall be searching for updates.

It seems very good so far. Make sure that there is a very strong plot, usually when OCs are invited into fanfiction there is very weak, cliche plots. Also, you might need to watch out with writing cockney accents, it can be very difficult to read them. You seem to have done a good job with them though.
~ CP

Overrun by cuteness *twitches*. That was aborable and I loved how she had to ask Jellylorum what her name was. Positively adorable!

Cute. Very cute. I like it. Update soon.

Hello this is awsome first fiction! Wow, I have nothing to critique. This is great. Just a small warning for all made up characters, make sure she isn't a Mary-Sue. ie. Prefect, pretty, excellent singer, great dancer, overly angsty, ect...basically, she needs flaws. They don't have to be major, but the character needs to be human, or should I say cat. Anyhow, great story, it is going on my story alert list.