Izumi:

A great job on both chapters. The characters -- both human and Digimon -- are individual and distinctive. The story also flows very well throughout both chapters because you have a great instinct for narrating an individual scene and then shifting between scenes. The only suggestions I'd have are stylistic choices. One is moving the "author's note" information to the top rather than having a prefacing lead-in, notes, and the rest of the chapter. Second, consider not using lines to section the text for the reader. Let transitional text segue the reader from scene to scene, even if it a major shift in location or focus. Backflashes might require some distinctive separation, but with regular shifts, let the readers read. Well done, continue.

yo, nice stuff, although, i got a questoin...when will you get chapter 11 up?

Wow, i can't wait to see the rest of the chapters.