I think this is an awesome story idea. i personally would love to see this story finished, because this is a great idea. i'm very curious as to why none of the senshi are helping those on the outskirts though.

but... isn't Minako suppoed to be Venus?

~Immortal Sailor Cosmos

I love how you told the story primarily from a potential victim perspective. I also how love your lace the story with mystery, sometimes answering the reader's questions and sometimes denying answer. I love you in the case of Minako and later Motoki you give just enough information to give away their identities. You did an excellent job closing out the story with several nice, hinting Minako and Motoki lines.

A B part of this story would be very appreciated. Preferably starting out from a Senshi perspective (Mars? NQS?) and then once again closing with Minako and Motoki. Should that not come to past, however, this still makes for a wonderful one-shot.

Excellent, excellent.

wow. I love the bitterness. I love how you bring up present issues like class wars and you include it in this so called utopian society called Crystal Tokyo. I love your stories and I know this one is going to grab me like Underserving, Oak Evolution, Deux es Machina etc. Keep up the goodwork.

Great Job