I liked your story, a good return to Fantasia and the rivalry between Atreyu and Gmork. Great use of Artax and Morla, as well as Falkor and the ruined city, plus nice to meet a new villain in Tir.

It's nice to read something that captures the spirit of the Neverending Story.

I have to say it has been years since I have seen the movies, they were my favorite when I was growing up. So much that when I found the collectors series with both part 1 and 2 together on DVD I bought it for my kids.
To have someone write from this is something I had wanted since I was a child! Awesome work and I could vision it in my head the whole time I read it. You stayed very well with the story line, and I give you many KUDOS for that. Only thing I would suggest to do is to proff read your work. There were few minor spelling corrections needed, but all in all- Great Job!

Hi!

First off, I am so glad I found your story! I love "The Neverending Story," and there is so little fanfiction of it. I think that your story is the only one here that actually pertains to it at all.

I like the idea and the general flow of the story. It felt like something that could actually happen in the NES universe.

However, there were mistakes. It also read oddly, especially the dialogue.

I'd love for you to continue this. If you'd like, I could beta read for you to help work out the kinks. Feel free to email me; my email address is in my profile.

Good luck in all that you do! :)

~ Tsukasa-Magic

This is so cool!
I'm scared though...G'mork is really terrifying but I can't wait to see what happens next!