Cute chapter.

Ahh thats cute! LOVE IT CONTINUE SOON PLEASE!

are you insane! this chapter is brilliant! i love these little stories. just one liners. no big insight into feelings or surroundings, no battles with inner demons, nothing. just simplicity. love it.

This is a great story! LOVE IT! Was that the last chapter or are you writing more?

OMG I LOVED THIS STORY! IT WAS THE CUTEST THING I HAVE EVER READ!

these stories are so cute!

Amazing. I came on here, after months of not coming, thinking "Well, im bored, maybe ill find something," and find something I did. LOVE it. Amazing. Love your style too. Your typos are fine by me, I couldnt even notice any!

This was so sweet! I loved it!

aww thats soo cute!

just read your first three chapters and i love it! the simplicity of it is amazing and beautiful and so wonderful. love it!

I liked ur little poem/short story, great story, continue soon please.

Okay, I have a few things to say to you, and I'll try to write them in the least confusing way I can. :P

1. Make your sentences longer, or paragraphs, because short like this gets boring.

2. Why is there nothing but smiles and blushing and only like one scene of talking?

3. The second chapter makes no sense. Who's talking? What the hell is going on?

4. The third chapter goes off into ranbling and makes the end less interesting, you need to leave with a BOOM! God, explode something woman!

5. Proofreading is a HUGE part in this. Many spelling errors and the sentences that you even have are mostly fragmented and make no sense.

Other than these few things it honestly isn't that bad. Out of ten I'll be sure to give you an 8.

~DF