A lovely little story you have here, quite the interesting look into Jack's past. Good job

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Good Story! It was superb!

Read mine called Reflections.

~Never Eat Tripe It's Sheeps Stomach!~Vaporeon-Chan

Nice. I know that the story mainly focuses on Raiden/Jack but Solidus really caught my eye, coming off as both sociopathic and caring simultaniously. Anyway, good job.

Hello, I'm Fly. You may remember my crude doodles from the MGSlash oekaki...

Anyway. I loved this. You have the MGS-style dialogue absolutely nailed, and I liked how you used the cigarettes as a metaphor for Jack not being a child (unless I'm completely missing the point, which is likely). And Solidus was a fantasticly creepy bastard, as usual.

Well done!

Great story! Solidus is the coolest!