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| Immortal-Vampire-Lover 2008-06-22 ch 7,  | abuseAlright I am very sorry, but this is pretty stupid. It doesn't make sence at all! Have you read the books? |
| Katchelle87 2007-11-20 ch 7, | abuseThis is very good! |
| h2oangel505 2007-08-22 ch 6, | abusei love the concept and ur idea for bella's power is very ceative.. i like it... i really want to find out how Rose died so u should update soon! |
| Katchelle87 2007-08-19 ch 6, | abuseThat was cute, and a nice twist. |
| Keep'ncool 2007-05-29 ch 5, anon. | abuseI myself have read Twilight and New Moon several times. You have everything correct except that if Bella is a vampire now she would not be able to cry. Other wise what you have so far is awesome. I must say that i hope you get bored over the summer so that you will update. lol |
| dragonfly454 2007-05-17 ch 5, | abuseaw that was so sad! |
| Bill-Kaulitz-Lover 2007-05-16 ch 5, | abuseawsome story, is this edward+bella fic |
| Mrs. Optimus Prime 2007-05-16 ch 5, | abuseWHAT?! Edward! You love Bella! This is so good. Please update soon. I want to read what happens. Please update soon! Mrs. Optimus Prime |
| LittleAlbatross 2007-05-16 ch 5, | abuseJust a few tidbits for you to consider: Edward's "mom" is named Esme, not Esmet. Also, when Bella woke up after being unconscious for two weeks, she probably would have devoured that doctor. She'd be one very hungry, non-"vegetarian" vampire. It takes a lot of work to get those topaz eyes, just think of Jasper. One last thing, she wouldn't have been able to go to sleep after she woke up in the hospital. Vampires don't sleep. |
| BrownEyedGurl 2007-05-16 ch 1, | abuseThat is an awesome line! the lion and the lamb thing! awesome! |
| Touchwood 2007-03-10 ch 4, | abuseI love the bit where Edward tells Bella that her human years are the best of her life...very affecting. Be sure to watch sentence grammer. No one's perfect, but I did notice that you contain alot of periods in your sentences, but try using commas to make it flow better. Other than that, great job and I look forward to more |
| Igor Lollipop 2007-03-09 ch 4, | abuseOh noes! Not a cliffy. x.x; Update soon, I love this story! |
| Miyu Mira 2007-03-07 ch 4, | abuseNot bad thanks for the heads up on the update! Update soon! XD |
| h2oangel505 2007-03-01 ch 4, | abusechapter are to freaking short! ahahah pleas make them longer! other than that i like it |
| marijolee 2007-02-28 ch 1, | abuseHmm...you are a great writer :D. I have 1 question though...IS CHAPTER 4 THE END?!?! I would seriously die... |