Ah, sorry I should of given an example.

Say; He blushed in embarassment before replying. "embarassment" should be "embarrassment". xD

And in chapter 3 "Suddenly, the feeling of sadness and worry were dissapearing."
"dissappearing" should be "disappearing".

Just minor mistakes; nothing to be ashamed of.

This is excellent!~

8 and a half out of ten

I love this story, but I think the chapters are getting shorter ><

The only thing wrong is that you should have longer chapters plus a few spelling and grammar mistakes here and there, maybe you should write this in Microsoft Word and use the Spelling and Grammar Check Tool.

It's really useful and saves you a lot of time.

Wow, this story is really good! Chapters are short, but the plot is interesting and the character interactions are very interesting and I can believe them. ^-^ This story is going on my Alert list and I hope you update soon~

Well, sigh, looks like I can't find additional chapters here, eh?
BTW, you might want to read my story on pretty please?
Still going good, want to know if Taki isn't such an @sshole after all.

Erm, to all people who are including actual gameplay facts into their reviews, please note that this is fan-FICTION, an Archer doesn't necessarily have to be the weakest party class in-game. Again, the details in this story aren't all fact.

Anyway, keep it up. :D

Wow, great story! Taki's personally doesn't really fit an archer's though, but I guess it's better that way. =] It's sorta like Heiji/Hj, (Trojan Pony Born to Burn (Eien Kaosu's character) and Eien Kaosu's Omoide no Kakera) I would rather quit MS and never play any RPG ever again than made her/him a goody-goody archer. I must say, the top three Bowmen/Hunters/Rangers I respect the most in the MapleStory fandom would be Akuji from Lost (KaosLord), Heiji Kaosu from BtB/OnK (Trojan Pony/Eien Kaosu) and Taki. =]

Kana's "I need to be the best to show those "men" women are better" attitude made me frown more than once through the story. Even though I am quite similar to her, I don't think that the was very necessary for her to do that to Taki. I can bet that he had to spend alot more time to get to where he is in the top 10 archers, from personal experience. I still remember that one of my friends once said that a Lv. 30 archer is well worth a Lv. 5X mage. Even with our great range, accuracy, HP, and skills, we have ZERO party skills, making us not exactly the favorite choises for a party. I also know what takes an archer months to achieve, a mage, warrior or thief can achieve in weeks. (Personal experience.) Also, I respect Taki for lasting that long as an archer, since like I've said before, archers are hard to level. REALLY hard to level.

Well, this ends my really long rant, and if any of that had offensed you, no offense.

Heiji Kaosu.

oh nice story

what level are they?

Hey Antoshi, it's Ben. Again, I'd just like to say that this story is great, and that you don't stop writing.

Also, could you rate my story? It's right above yours. I really need feedback.

I just read the rest of the chapters. I think ur Fanfiction is more sensible than some other fictions.
;)

HEY! THIS STORY IS VERY VERY VERY NICE. PLS CONTINUE WRITING I LIKE IT.
:)

hi!this story is great and I wish you continue!!this is intresting and I hope u write more fanfics!Very good=)