hey, this is really good. Who would have thought you got this great story from your mom? Kepp up the good work.

aww! did you have to leave it like that! aw come on! this would have made an interesting story! well your the author and there isn't much we can do... in any case good short story, i enjoied what there was of it.

i like it

I loved this! It was so hot! Great job on it!

Excellent story. Yami's father heard everything. Oh man that's priceless. Are you going to do a sequal? Don't leave it at that. Don't leave us readers in suspense. What happens next?

The father.. he heard everything..-dies of mad laughter-
-resurrects-.. That was brilliant-wipes the tears away-. Awesome fic!

Great ficlet.

That was good!

*closes mouth and wipes away dro8l*
wow, that was pretty hot. nice job :D
I'm sad that it's the last chapt for sure, but i suppose I'll go with it. just joking.lol. that was a great chapt though!
*gives hug*
-s.o

I loved this story! It was really good. I just loved it.

I've told you before that I don't like lemon that much, I prefer lime, but this was really well done. The first half of the chapter was ok, although you seem to like bashing Yami's father almost as much as you like bashing Anzu! XD

The lemon itself was written well though. The only thing I would say is that the chapter is fairly generic, and could fit in any AU Yami/Yugi fic. It doesn't really relate back to the first chapter in any way, other than the two of them being boyfriends. Nothing major, and it being so well written means I can excuse it, but that's just something to think of.

This is very well written again. You definitely have a knack for characterization of the main characters. As a yugioh AU it works well because you place the characters well within their setting. You build up a world that is completely unlike yugioh and yet still makes sense with the characters being there.

The Yami/Yugi relationship is as well developed as it can be in as few words as were in this chapter, but it did seem very fast. They were being very physical with each other even before the end, which didn't always seem to make that much sense.

Still, this is a very well written YY/Y fic, and I shall now R&R the second chapter.

Oh yeah, and you REALLY hate Anzu, don't you? XD

nice! i'm on redbull again! hihihihihihihihi!

not in a mood of review now but your story is worth it. by me it's 1 o' clock a.m. and tomorrow it's school, i'm hungry and my mom is downstairs and if she caught me i'll be grounded and i'd drunk redbull
toph- 20 cans!
jin- new record and i'm hyper! read a stoey, read a story!
ja ne!

I'm so in love with your stories. Love 'em all. This.. was..hot.