I think you have a good storyline. Keep continue it !

ok, um, the thing with adding Fullmetal Alchemist into the fic as a crossover is a pretty good idea but uh, WHY is it almost exactly like the fanfic 'Juugo' by Hououza?
i read some earlier reviews and noted that people who have read this didn't notice this as well because they either don't care or haven't read Juugo before. except for The Fanfic Guardian and maybe someone else who i didn't see noticed this.
i agree with The Fanfic Guardian's review about this too.
the first few chapters are technically called copying unless you got permission from Hououza to do this or you are Hououza with a different username.
i don't mean to sound rude or anything, i'm just trying to point that out.


- From the Weirdo That Always Reviews

awesome story!! i love the way u blend the 2 worlds 2gether, sheer genius!! I hope u don't mind but can i suggest an OC too??

Name: Kojiro elric

nickname: The Storm Alchemist

height(im singaporean so im going to use meters and kilograms): 1.89m

weight:80kg(most are muscles)

Personality: Kojiro is a very active person, he prefers fighting or moving around to sitting still and relaxing, his not really the biological son of edward, he was a orphan that was discoved by edward and then was adopted, he left seji and lars 2 years after edward's dissapperance, his last words to them were"im going to drag that shorty father back to us even if he kills me!!"

Alchemic Powers: like his name suggest, he can control all aspect of a storm, be it a hailstorm, a firestorm or a thunderstorm, in fact he can be call a one man artellilary umit. however most of the time he just smaller versoins of these attacks, soch as an icle, a lighitng bolt etc. He has a trasmutation circle tatooted all over his back, with to sides branching off onto his arms all the way to his palms.Given time to prepare he will wear metal gaulets that will boost his attacks from his hands.Also, he can only transmuate a storm through the cricle on his back and tiwards his Kakugane.

Kakugane: Susaanoo's blade
This is a blade staff(think star wars double bladed lightsaber, onli the beams are replace with metal blades) that has the powers to wield the storm. This weapon is meant for a middle range weapon and his a amplifer for storm base attacks.

Weakness: Kojiro's weakness are that channling the power of the strom is very tiring, after summoning a storm, he has to rest to recover his energy for about 2-3 hours, his absolute limit is three storms, afte casting three storms in a row, kojiro will die from lack of energy, if he is interruppted in the process of summoning a storm, the energy cost will be the same only that noting will happen.Moreover when kojiro is attacking, he cannot suddenly swith attacks, for example if he is launching a lighting bolt, he can't suddenly stop and launch a wind blast.

Uniform: Kojiro is unique in that he wears armor for his entire body,this armor is light weight and yet protect him very well. he also wears a blood red cowled cape that will slowly heal his injuries.

My idea for this chracter was mostly influnece by darth revan

So this is it, pls PM me if u like it and if it could be used or not in ur story, i still have many attacks i can give u for him.

I got to say I'm been watching your storys for a long time and I got to say I love the mix to them including this one of Negima and Fullmetal alchemist, but more so I like to thank you because it was you who got me into Buso Renkin, and last I want you to update this faster please, the waiting is killing me!

So till next time se ya!

Sizzling. So I take it that there's going to be some drama between Asuka and Nodoka when it's found that Seiji's in dire straits? Excellent.

Are you going to make the Wilhelm arc and the transformation of Chouno/Pappillion coincide? Or are you going to have Scar show up with Wilhelm?

Cool chapter! The events were nicely lined up, and the chapter was funny too. Update real soon, and keep up the good work!

So this Asuka is to Seiji what the blonde twit(Ayaka) is to Negi... Great, just the world doesn't need right now. You do realize that the captain of the dodgeball team is like that as well, and according to some, so is the class president of the magic world in the manga. That means we total of four twits, and even just one alone is a nightmare.

Typical Kazuki, still he wouldn't be fun or himself if he didn't behave the way he does. Good thing he did the sketch, or else Haruna would've definitely pestered them about the details, and the whole secrecy of magic/alchemy would've all over the world in a split second. Of course his sketch has to end up off from the actual appearence of the emo perv ** as I call Papillon.

Got to love Tokiko-sama's reaction to Asuna-san's threat to bathe Negi-san. As well as the follow up by Kazuki. Wait, Seiji got infected by the embryo?! Man, I hope he doesn't keep it a secret from those who can help. But knowing from this fic so far, he'll be stubborn to point of keeping it a secret. Let's hope the cure for his infection is the same as the Buso Renkin manga/anime.

Speaking of OC's, if you intend to use mine...he knows Negi, Seiji, and Laz, but is not a friend to them. He tends to call them the three stooges. He also knows Tokiko-sama and Kazuki, and is playing matchmaker for the two. He also acts more like Vegeta at times, particulary when the twits are around, and the twits being the blonde twit, the red twit, and the high school dodge ball captain twit. He'll show respect only to Tokiko-sama, Konoka-sama(mainly because since she's the dean's granddaughter), Setsuna-sama(because she's Konoka's body guard), Chisame-sama, Yuna-sama, Akira-sama, and Nodoka-sama. The twits will either be called twit or as Vegeta would call them 'onna.'

AH so there must be a god after all the most awsomest story in the world is back and nothing short of amazing and funny

nice job

YEAH! A NEW CHAPTER!

A tad shorter than your others, but still good. Now that Seiji has that embryo embeded in his leg, I wonder how that'll effect the story.

And ASuka is intersting character, though it says that she hangs out with the sports group, I have yet to see that happen. I would love to see hijinks with her and the group.

Anyways, please keep going!

Good to see a new update at last! Quite a slight cliffhanger I see - Seiji, you certainly gonna need some help just in case considering what that embryo's gonna do to you!

And interesting profile on Asuka - hope she doesn't heckle poor Seiji too much... ^^; then again, who knows how my OC would react. Speaking of OC, what do you think of him and the stats? Some of the attack names I got were from various anime, just in case I forgot to mention to you.

This is Final Genesis, signing out!

Nice update man.

I may sound like a writing teacher, but you use the passive voice. "Was" in particular. I don't mean to sound critical, but it gets annoyingly repetitive to hear the word "was" in every sentence or every other sentence, whatever.

Other than that, the story seems ok.

~Dusk Ado~

pretty good so far

Nice chapter! But please, PLEASE! Update! It's such a good and creative story that if you abandon it, it'd be a shame! The storyline's really creative, and all the characters have great personalities. Update soon, please! And, keep up the good work.:)

Nice start! Though, sometimes you change the POV unexpectedly. For example, you would be talking about Negi using the 3rd Person POV, but when he talks, he says "I", or "me", or any other personal pronoun. I suggest that you try to fix that up, and your story could be easier to understand. Otherwise, the beginning was good and interesting. Keep it up!:)