Oh, I like this.

Update soon, please.

whoever came up with the rhyme 'sticks and stones' is stupid. Words can hurt so much and you can never really take them back.
I love these makes me feel really for them all hope to see you continue this :)

I've always though Kisa was the most tragic character in Fruits Basket... you just confirmed that belief.

I sort of hate the world right now.

So painful. As always. The graduation is so perfect, going from normal teasing to bullying, and the rhyme casing. Sticks and stones. And the shift, because it's always cool to set something up and then change it.

"...sharpen their words to puncture through her smiles and shrugs..." -That's one of my favorite lines. Such a picture you paint...

And the whole... conditional love clause of the family, and how even if it's not there Kisa thinks it is... Gah!

"She can’t solve this through a game of tag. . . the games just got a lot more costly.

And words will always hurt you. . ."

-Second person to pull a Fading Grace on me in one day. That is so very much the perfect ending, such a heartwrencher. I just want to lock them all up somewhere and keep an eye on them, and... that just wouldn't work, but...

Makes me think of the whole theme in Brief Lives, a little, even though that was more about making mistakes. You just can't protect them, can't live their lives for them.

Wah, but Hiro... and, and, it's just so UNFAIR.

There is no justice. There's just us.

You're really freaking good at this. Which is unfortunate for your psyche.

Hah. I didn't figure it out last night... but when I saw email alert for chapter 3 of a fic I automatically knew it was this one. I am good.

Hm... If I write stories in pencil, does that mean the state of my brain is written in pencil? But I'm also working on readings, using yellow highlighter, and research paper, which is done in black ink and copious amounts of white-out.

And if I acutally looked at the title, and then looked at some words [Kisa and Hiro stand out], I would realize this is not Aya angst. Hm. So 1 demerit for jumping ahead of myself and going, "oh, wait...". But, I still retain 1 attaboy for knowing that it was this fic that was updated! Right?

I think that would have to be a classic sign of something wrong... Hiro not making a good elaborate excuse.

Aw... that makes me want to cry. Poor Kisa! The gradual spiral into despair is very nicely done. Especially for dead-brain-ness.

-Shinju

I like it. It's deep and it shows emotion.

this seems really thought out. i can imagine her chanting that just to try to reassure herself.
please update soon!

the way i see it, this chapter shows kyou's relationships with people because of this 'fire'. nice job!

i dont know much about rin (i'm still on volume 10! >.

Oh...

This is so beautiful tearjerking horrible. So, like, raw. The way it's all woven together, and everything, so - what I mean is, it feels like someone arranged a bunch of flowers so they make you cry just looking at them, but still look like they were just dumped in the vase. That's it. I can't say it better than that.

But the way his mom and Yuki and Kazuma are all in there, kind of defining the empty bits or something, is just perfect. And him thinking how he burned his mom alive just breaks me down.

Plus, of course, the huge tragedy of Kyo's life - that really, truly, no one sees and if they do, he doesn't notice because he's so convinced they don't. It's horrible and you make me feel it all at once. Evil people, I am SURROUNDED by them.

Is it sad that the denial joke always takes me a few minutes to work out?

I loveth your health, so I review!

"Kyou’s skin is clear of the bumps and bruises" My immediate reaction is, 'Yuki sure fixed that.' Then, I suppose, we should all stand and ponder the symbolism here, because it sounds like a profound symbolic statement, even if I'm not sure what the symbol actually is.

Kyou, Kyou, Kyou... kitties don't fly. Although they do always land on their feet. ...and that sounds like another symbolism of some sort...

"Yuki is condemned to be the doll on the shelf" Ouch. But that pretty much sums it up accurately.

"And the fire will continue to burn, because it’s better to fight a hopeless battle than to let it die."

Another well-done drabble! Beautiful, in that "it makes me sad and want to cry" way.

...no, I'm not entirely coherent tonight, for some reason. Meh. There's probably a philosophic ism for that.

-Windswift

What a depressing beginning.

Are we drawing the conclusion that that's an awfully violent lullaby? Because if you take it literally, it's not very comforting...

"and she is a beautiful sunny little girl" The epitome of how life had once been for Rin. Just... absolutely beautiful phrasing.

And the duality of it... "here is how it was the fairy tale, now here is how real life will be."

And there is a lot. I just don't know how to say it. I already used up all my writing... a summary and then summary+response for a 5 page itty-bitty print article on cord blood. So... much... writing...

-Shinju

AH SO HAPPY.

This is so lovely, the simple style and contrast of the two times in her life - you do them so well. The entire sixth paragraph [not counting the song] is just so incredibly heartbreaking; the whole... setup... Gonna cry. Poor Isuzu-san!

And the bit about her not being sure if she wants anyone to hear or not - so wonderfully off-balancing.

Which, actually, is kind of the whole thing... It makes me feel all wobbly, like the ground isn't straight, which is how it always is for Rin, what with being sick, and inside her head things sure as hell aren't straight. I'm thinking instability runs in the family, heh.

This is just all very unsettling and sobworthy. And, while I laugh at you for thinking of it that way, your SAYING that any of your writing has anything to do with mine makes me feel better about blatantly ripping you off so many times. So. Thank you.

I need to go get my balance back.