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| Yemi Hikari 2008-02-08 ch 1,  | abuseWow. This was nicely written and in character. Lance, and the other brotherhood ... they all have potential, but they don't see it. |
| narutorocks 2007-09-05 ch 1, anon. | abusecould you make another Prof. Charles Xavier & Avalanche pairing the genre can be general,friendship,adventure or family ithere can be romance between Avalanche and ShadowCat oh and make it so that if Avalanche learns more about his powers and trains them he can control earth and create shockwaves |
| Umi Pryde 2007-05-08 ch 1, | abuseThis was very interesting, I like the dialague they have. It really does sound like them and how they would talk to one another in that type of scenario. Good Job, I wish there was more to this though. |
| Ayaia of the Moon 2006-11-02 ch 1, | abuseVery good characterization! You've captured their traits and personalities very well! Too often I read Lance or the good ol' Prof. horribly out of character. I'm glad you've stayed true to them. +Fave!! ~Ayaia |
| corcrafields 2006-10-01 ch 1, | abuseThis is so special I just HAD to put it on my favorites list. You did such a wonderful job of capturing less obvious but so important sides of Lance and the Professor. The bookstore was a perfect setting. I loved how the professor wanted to correct his grammar - that was great. They're both a little underappreciated in my mind, and you had created a lovely little ficlet that is quite true. Thank you! |
| j.l. 2006-09-29 ch 1, anon. | abusegood short story. lance never really seemed to me to be that bad of a guy and i'm glad you didn't make him a villian in your story. are you going to continue this story? |
| Obsidian76 2006-09-29 ch 1, | abuseWell-written Evo fics are getting hard to find these days, and this was a very nice little ficlet. I hope you write some more in the future. :) |
| Spadde 2006-09-29 ch 1, | abuseAvalanche is my favorite evo mutant, and you nailed is character, as well as the professor's, down on a dime. This was really good. I hope you keep writitng. |
| theweirdperson 2006-09-28 ch 1, | abuseAw! That's so sweet! You did a great job of keeping your characters in character, yet also showing a side of Lance that isn't often seen. |
| GothikStrawberry 2006-09-28 ch 1, | abuseMaybe he would see it sooner if you had told him about his potential while he was living with you ...*grumbles*...Sorry. I have 'Joyride'-issues... Anyway I really liked this fic. You did a good job writting both Lance and the Professor - I thought that Charles had the urge to correct Lance's grammar was too cute. :) |
| zeroeye 2006-09-28 ch 1, anon. | abuseyay nice fic how aboot we make this a chapter fic and not a one shot eh? |
| DOJ 2006-09-28 ch 1, | abuseI *really* enjoyed this story. Both Lance and the Professor tend to be underappreciated characters...only appearing in parodies or so that they can be bashed...or, in Lance's case, as a catalyst for someone else's relationship. But this was great - it was extremely well written, had a great plot, and your portrayal of the characters was realistic - you kept both Xavier and Lance in character really well. You may not get many reviews on it...just because the Professor talking to Lance may not interest many people...but don't underestimate this fic. I'm having difficulties putting it eloquently, but I really did enjoy this...I'm glad you wrote it ^_^ ~*~DOJ~*~ |