Okay. I don't get, like half of this because I don't read comics or anything like that.

The HP stuff I got, possibly because I know lots about it. A suggestion, though, would maybe say retirement community instead of Sun City. I'm not sure too many people outside of Arizona know what that is.

Dubbledore seems like Dumbledore, though, so I give you props for that.

James (fenimore!) Cooper kinda slips into and out of the accent, noticible in the paragraph about the origins of the shodowen. Dentyne is spelled with a 'y'.

The thing about the shirt seems odd. I'd remove the word black from the beginning. It's mentioned a lot in that sentence.

I liked the "So many possibilities" paragraph. It was very... human. And sorta touching.

Thanks to your story I learned what a toque was.