I absolutely love this story! It is amazing! Keep up the great work! I can wait for more! Thx for posting this awesome story!

I hadn't even considered the fact that this might be a WIP. I said I wanted to look at this objectively, and I did. Although, I must admit, the moment my eyes locked onto the word DNA, I felt this insane urge to skip the rest of the story and childishly claim "I see what you did there!" Well played, very well played. I still feel incredibly close-minded, because I only allowed myself to enjoy the story after the conversation between Don and Alan about Don's lineage. Even the heavy suspicion of your goals did not assuage my panicky mind. I guess I could say I made progress, in any event, as after the third or fourth chapter I didn't look at with disgust, just from a legal stand point. And then, after the introduction of Amita and her silly fawning over a wounded Charlie, I wanted to cry out with indignation. No one should be left alone like it seemed Don was going to be, I don't care who their emotions are aimed at. It just shouldn't work that way in fiction. Even Stephen King, who almost never writes a happy ending, lets one or more characters fall in love and enjoy that love. Anyway, thanks for being an impartial and somewhat-uninvolved participant and provider in my search to better myself.

I do have a few objective observations. When I read the first chapter, I forgot about the author completely, even though I've read almost all of your HPSS fics, because the first chapter had almost impeccable grammar. Then, after that, I was forcibly reminded. You make the same mistakes in all of your stories. You miss a word, you swap letters around, you type a letter in place of another (despite the two letters not being anywhere near each other on the keyboard), you even have this naivety of what sex is between two men. It's endearing, but odd. In any case, all of your mistakes are reminiscent of a person who is typing too fast, so I find no real fault in your grammar.

Also, I don't think you should continue this story. It's perfect like it is. Leave the other stuff alone. The opinions of friends and co-workers aren't something anyone would look forward to, reading or writing, and besides, after all of the angst in nearly every chapter, they deserve a fluffy end, with something comedic as the last line.

I've never reviewed after only reading the first chapter, but considering the circumstances, I feel I should. When I first saw the pairing I was confused, because they are brothers. I have four brothers and two sisters myself, and had never seen anything like this. I am not sheltered by any means, it just never occurred to me there would be a following of this sort. Heaven knows, there are about a thousand sites on the internet that reference a relationship between Harry and James, in Harry Potter, but I never expected this was something that would make it's way into semi-popularity. I'll admit that at first glance at the summary and pairing, I squicked. After thinking it over, I decided to pursue this story to it's end, in an effort to squash my less-than-open opinion. I like to think myself an open-minded person, and will use this as an opportunity to view a side of myself I had never considered. I realize how that sounds, but I don't know how else to word it. I am angry at myself for my close-minded first response, and I'm going to read this objectively to assuage my fears of ever being close-minded about anything. I don't know if I will comment/review after every chapter, but I warn you that I might. I'll probably even ask questions I expect no answer to. Please be patient with me, this is a world I have never thought about for any length of time, and I will basically be seeking some form of comfort in knowing I can view it objectively and comment as such. In that track, I must say, the fact that you have no beta is shocking as there are little to no mistakes. Except for one continuous mistake in the last few paragraphs (Don't, instead of Don's), your grammar is impeccable.

I really love the way this is going, and I think it is incredibly well written. I look forward to your next post eagerly.

-Alexi Naori

I read this on AFF and came over to ff.net hoping to find it so I could set up a story alert just in case you come back someday. I was really excited to see that not only was is here, you had an extra five chapters! Really good story; love the moral conflict yet allowing that to fade into the background by changing their biological relationship. Plus how you rite them together is super HOTT!

Hey, nice story here. I hope for a continuation but it's been a while since you've updated. It's a cute story and I really like the interplay between Don and Charlie (if you know what I mean, hah). Anyway, I hope to see more.

Hey I just wanted to say I love your story! I was also wondering if you had an idea of when you were going to update again? Hope to hear some more soon! ALice

Please, please, please tell me that you will update this story.

This story is fucking amazing and it will be a shame if you leave it undone. I wanna know what will happen next, so pretty please? *puppy eyes* I really like your story. I will wait as long as it takes for you to write the next chapter. But please don't stop it here, okay?

With love,

Lunaryu

Reading this got me back into watching Numb3rs which I haven't even thought about since it first came out. So I was definitely watching it with a Don/Charlie slant and I can so see it! I love your explanations and dramatic reveals and I especially love your characterization of the two boys, very well done. I look forward to the next parts!

I just love your story, and can’t wait for you to post the next chapter.

I think it will be so much fun to see the reactions of fiends and family. Will this affect Don at work? Will Amita form a stink about Charlie being gay, and with his cousin no less?

I think Don being gay will have an impact with his superiors. Maybe they will not let his lover/cousin consult for the FBI anymore? After all there are rules about co workers not being romantically involved with each other.

I think this story is only getting better. Thanks for sharing with us.

Finally! Eppescest fic. I've been looking, but not found many or any at all really. Most don't like the pairing, or they are really poorly done. I'm really liking this so far.

Concrit:

registered in Don't line of sight,

should be Don's not Don't

shadow that crossed over Don't countenance

again it should be Don's not Don't.

Heh... Heh... This was good... I love this story... Update soon?

lovely lovely story!

Omg, i love this story. I especially love the way you got around them being 'brothers' so they could be together! it's great!

O.O! wow, i could hardly remember why that title sounded so familiar when i checked my alerts, although this story is in my favorites pretty much since ive first found it. i admit i was mad at you for abandoning it for so long, but you really had/have some mighty good reasons (im taking care of my mom too, so i know what a hard job that can be) the new chapter however is absolutely FANTASTIC! youve got me hooked right away again - as if youd ever really lost me ;-) i cant wait for the next update, and am looking forward to everyones reaction to their new relationship. i guess alan will have a hard time to see his two sons so deeply in love with each other, but in the end hell be happy for them. amita however is on another page - her barely concealed homophobia plus the knowledge that charlie basically ended dating/mooning over her FOR DON is bound to make her freak out something nasty. if she doesnt get a grip on her stupid prejudices it will be the end of their friendship (never liked her anyway, charlie deserves better! LOL)