First of good story so far. Secondly you should not have rewritten that part about the SDC paying for the Great Fox (well at least not into the way that you did). That bill at the end of Star Fox 64 was actually adressed to General Pepper for the Star Fox team's services. (Would you want to go risk your life trying to kill some evil genius, who has a gigantic army, without getting paid about $300 per enemy that you turn into scrap metal, NO) Don't worry many people make the mistake that you made, no offense meant.

Thanks for the input. I rewrote that section of the story so the Star Fox team didn't get the ship for free

Marq said the same thing i woulda said (& minutes before me). somewhere in the fic u said that the SDC paid for the great fox before starfox 64. actually, they used the bill on the invoice at the end of SF64 to pay for it (doesn't seem like much)

This is a good example of a sci-fi/action fic.

It goes along just like some kind of action

cartoon show.

I sure hope you write more, its pointless so far

Hey! This is very good! Well written too! Keep up the good work, surely enough Dr. Andross (under your author) will be very interesting to us all.