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Ash
about... ten
White Hair... brown eyes... on the slim side...
easily depressed or angered, but usually calm, smart too..
yells out "Cows!" "Penguins!" or some other usually black and white animal after three minutes of silence...

Oh, yeah! I like it a lot :) It works very well, and Peter Pan is perfect (ik... nothing's perfect, but you know what I mean)

I can't think of any constructive critisism... because I'm kinda rushed... but it all seemed very good... I just can't wait for the next chapter.

For your consideration:

Name: Duke
Approximate age: 8 and three-quarters, and very proud of it.
Appearance: disheveled strawberry blonde hair, pale skin that burns easily, average build, a bit shorter than his counterparts
Personality: energetic, enthusiastic, loves to scrap and wrestle around, always the first to laugh at any joke.
Quirks: Earned his nickname after constantly harassing the other Lost Boys to "Put up yer dukes!"

Nice start, though I'm curious as to how you're going to make this different from all the other "Wendy's daughter/granddaugther/third cousin/dog fly off to Neverland with Peter Pan" stories.

O! I HAVE ONE! PICK ME! PICK ME!

Name: Mouth (you can change it, I couldn't think of a better one)
Approximate age: eleven
Appearance: Blond hair, brown eyes, skinny,
Personality: Won't ever shut up (hence the name)and often gets in trouble with Peter because of it
Quirks: very vain. refuses to wear animal skins like the rest, so instead he wears pirate clothes.


You don't have to use this guy if you don't want to.

Hee! I love it! XD I love your writings. If I'm allowed to, I'll submit another!

Name: Beets
Approximate Age: 11
Appearence: ash brown hair, shaggy and hanging in his grey eyes, lean with a mole under his left eye
Personality: Sullen, competitive, short-tempered
Quirks: Bugs, he adores bugs! Particularly beatles.

Again, use him only if you like! I love your work, so I'd love to help you any way I can (You can change Beets and Treaken's names if you like! I have no fair for names! ^_^' )

Oh! I love this! How incredibly fun! I always did love your Peter Pan stories! XD I'll help any way I can!

Name: Treaken
Approximate age: 10
Appearance: Curly mop of black hair, deep green eyes, freckles, lean
Personality: Wide-eyed and bushy tailed, always up for anything
Quirks: Loves plants. He'll pick anything he finds interesting and throw it in a pile in the Home Under the Ground. It annoys him to no end when the flowers dry up.

Use him if you like! Can't wait to see more! ((I'll send more if you like! You can use any Lost Boys in my story, 'Adventure Awaits!' ((they are introduced in Chapter Two ((So I don't bore you with my story! XD) if you like! XD

Oh! I like is A LOT! It's so good. Peter is Perfect! You have to finish this one... because it starts off so well... and knowing you, it will end very well :)

O!! I LOVE IT SO FAR!! Could I possibly be able to send in a character? PLEASE GAREN!
XxGinnyxX