I liked your story, Christian and Wilbur were very cute together. Wonder how Julia and Kimber come in.

update soon that was gd

xx

HAHA that sounds JUST like Christian.

I loved it.

Great story so far! I'm glad your bringing Wilbur..er Gabriel back. But I just hope it's not a C/J romance.

Oh and a little note, an Epilogue is like the end of a story. You want to use a Prologue to begin one

gd but it aint A 20 minutes later etc its 20 minutes later just thought id let ya know ]

I could not stop laughing! A breakfast bar and a bottle of water? I mean that was priceless and so Christian! I had almost forgot about baby Wilbur. I'm glad you're bringing him back into the fold. Christian took good care of him.

Erm dno what to say lol, some of it seems like Christian and some of it doesnt. However it seems that maybe it will be a good story. Make sure that you don't lose the plot about the characters though and make sure that you keep them and make them act like they do in the show. There's nothing worse than people changing the characters. I like the fact that you have given Christian a sense of humour about the fact that he always does this and the fact that he is only sleeping with women because he isnt gay lol, although a chapter about him being confused as he realises that he is too close to Sean (maybe kinda like a series 3 follow on) to add some humour to the fanfiction. But great start hunny looking forward to reading the rest x