are you still writing? i actually really enjoyed this story.

Why don't you make the story (and Hold Me) longer rather than one chapter?

I just found this today and I have to say that I was quite impressed by it. Not one hint of smut, nor fluff; just a decent story.

I've never event thought about Orton and Carilto together...that could be kinda hot!

I loved it.

xoxoxo

Shanny

aww too cute! carlito was sweet; i like reading it and i hope you write many more. :)

I didn't like it. Sorry.

Carlito barely gets stories written about him, so when he does? I jump to read it. Slash or het, it doesn't matter. This story was not BADLY written, in my opinion, but it was rushed. Carlito doesn't seem like the type of person who would be making out with Randy Orton. If you want me to believe that he would, make it seem believable: they had sex (as you implied) because Carlito busted Randy's lip and he feels he should make it up to him? Okay...?

It seemed to go from "I'm sorry" to "saliva mixing" without much explanation as to why they're kissing. I guess because Carlito was sorry and Samantha turned Randy down? This story seemed written simply for the sake of being written: without much explanation, character exploration, hell... I wouldn't mind seeing them bond a little before jumping into bed! God, Carlito must have been horny!

The characters come off almost like non-dimensional guys looking for a quick fuck. This story could have been great, but it was rushed incredibly just so they can kiss a little faster. A wasted effort.

i liked this story!

good work!I wanna read more about your stories.

A great story! Enough said. :-)

it may not be shawn/kurt but it was still damn good.