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| Kaline Reine 2007-07-10 ch 3, | abuseUm, right... It was ok, but you need to space this out into paragraphs. If you don't know what I'm talking about, then try some of the other stories on this site for ideas. great job with spelling. The plot kinda seems a little dull. Maybe add a little action in, it kinda seems to drone on and on a bit. But that's ok, you could always tweak it up a bit. It's hard to read, but funny all the same. Thanx, -Dreams Of Dementia |
| JaceG 2006-11-13 ch 1, | abuseI'd give this review on a scale from 1 to 10 a 7. I enjoyed the play on characters names and this seems like it could be directed by the crazy directors of austin powers. Try maybe to space it all out and maybe organize the dialogue in a more readable manner. Maybe tie it all together a little more, as of now it seems a little random |
| smartiesnorter 2006-11-03 ch 1, | abuseI thought it was a cool little story, and extremely funny. I really enjoy funny stories, and this is one i could get into, because it is written after a movie, so i got into it. In the end i really enjoyed it and is really cool. |
| DarkDemonWithin 2006-10-06 ch 1, | abuseAwsome story, Dr. Evil couldn't handle a kid if he tried! Hopefully he can pull something off! Keep writin'! |