hmm i like that

I like your idea, please continue, it is pretty good i'd say

Yay! This is such a cute story!! Like, full on CUTENESS.

I'm laughing my head off picturing what Kiba and Hinata look like, as little kids playing in the sand! I'd love to draw some pictures for your story! But maybe I should work out how to use my scanner and neaten up my crazy doodles first, ne?

I'd be cute to have the good old SasuSaku NaruHina ShikaIno NejiTen pairings come in, but it's okay if you don't like them. Especially now that Kiba's in the story, I can kinda feel sorry for him. He and Hinata sparked :P

It's really good writing, and you have a great writing style. Can't wait to see what you do with this fic. It has got to be one of my favourites so far. It's also nice to know that there is actually an innocent Naruto fic on fanfiction. You can't really get nastier than holding hands when you're so little.

How old are they? Sorry if you had already put that in the story. I must have missed that line :P

I think it's be cool if the story just talked about all of them, not really focusing on one main person or two. That way, everyone who reads it can like it, cuz there will be a little bit of everything.

Is Gaara and his sibs coming in? It'd be funny to see Gaara and sand. Chaos in the playground :D It would also be a touching moment for him to get neglected by everyone...

-wipes away tear-

Apologies if I have intruded in your story. It is yours, and I probably shouldn't have made so many suggestions :P

-bangs head on desk-

Some really nice work you have there!

-Moonlight^^

P.S. -skips off to read Apart and other stories-

God, that was almost sickengly sweet, i loved Hinatas reaction of seeing Naruto for the first time.

*SQUEE* yes, I'm a big NaruHina fan but this was to adorable. *sigh* Kiba is a darling. I wanna pet him.

"Purply-eyes" and "Kiba-wanwan"... aw, that WAS extreme cuteness! So adorable. xD How old are they? I'm going to guess five, but it would be nice to just have some clarification. Anyway, it was very very cute and I loved it. :) Can't wait for more characters.

Aww! How cute! I can't wait for more! Ya know, you're turning me into a KibaHina lover, even though I still love NaruHina all the way, but still... lol Keep up teh awesome writing!

I wanna be in the story! Can I? Here's a profile

Name: Naobi
Hair: Red
Eyes: Blue
Likes: Candy, video games, TCG, candy, listening to music, candy, sitting in trees, and did I mention candy? Oh, and Gaara
Dislikes: broccoli and clowns (LOL)