Neat little story. I think that you have the tone of Serenity/Firefly down. I didn't read anything that didn't sound right in the dialog. Putting in the Chinese was a good touch, and I'm sure that many people don't do it. Did you use an online translator?

As for issues, I think you may have changed POV once or twice within a scene, but it wasn't problematic. Hardly a quibble. The gun knowledge all scanned with my own intel about such things.

Cool fic! I'll have to read more of your stuff.

This story was awesome! I can't believe it only has 2 reviews. The characterization was spot-on; the dialogue was great; the story was just so fun to read! I hope you are still inspired to write Jaylee, as this is, to date, one of my favorites!

loved it :) Great characteristation and sort of sweet in a rough Jayne-being-as -gruff-as-ever way. Thanks for sharing it.

Shiny ! I think that this was a very important lesson for Kaylee -- fortunately for her, she's a quick learner !