wow. i love the story. what i might suggest though, is to show some indication as to when the times change. sometimes, it gets a little confusing when i dont know time has already passed in the story and that now something else has happened. i can still, read without too much s=trouble so just think about it.

WHAT?! THERE'S REALLY A WHITE SUITED MAN IN THE MANGA?! I'M GOING BACK TO LOOK!

this is a really good chapter...and appropiately named

OH HOW BEAUTIFUL! (sniff, sniff)...SO...SAD...WAH!

this is, by far, the best FMA fan fic i have EVER read! the ending was sad, but i'm onto part two and i can tell from reading this story that you won't disappoint!

Ah! Why did it have to be so sad!? You made me get my keyboard wet from crying so much. Why no happy endings? Aw.

Oh well, I enjoyed your story very very much! I spent the whole day reading it. I just hope that the revised version isn't so darn sad.

If you make it sad again, I eat your face. And of course, I'm joking.

I can't wait to read more and I totally think you should get published one day for some amazing book I'm sure you'll write. Awesome job!

I was never credited for going through the 1st chapter again. ._.

cry cry.

oh well.

wait wait wait wait 1st person what the hell
lovely how it shortened down to nothing, though. :3
Good job, nonetheless.

Big fish is a wonderful movie! And a female Kyo for Al would be perfect! lolz.

Are you aware that somone is copying this story, except not as well done? But the lines (and I mean to the line!) and general outline are the same.

Oh my... I cried at the last chapters. I don't think that I have ever read a story with some kind of sad ending that was this good. There's nothing to say anything else about it.

Uhm.. you've probably got some other reviews on other stories from me. I just want you to know that I've taken a liking to your stories and writing styles and that I'm reading more, so expect more reviews from me. (Don't expect reviews on everything, 'cause you'd be getting A LOT reviews from me and you'd have to read that all. Unless you'd like it. You only have to say it.)
I was also wondering if you do any requests? I've had some ideas that need to get out of my head, while I'm having a huge writers block that's bugging me. Just say it, if you don't want to help me, 'cause I'll be looking for someone else, then.
Anyway... Your story was great, so I'll be going to read another one.
Bye!

Shadow

hi its Bagel um IM GONNA KILL YOU THE VERY MINUTE I SEE YOU IN ORCHESTRA OMG THAT WAS AN AMAZING CHAPTER!1

lol this is a great story i lurvs it YAY ed-fluffness

What about thanks for helping you come up with the idea, drawing Robyn's designs and the multiple drawings I've given you? ._.

OMG! *squeel* damn...that was sad! poor Robyn. I dont know what to really say about this chapter, sure it was sa, im pretty sure everyone got that, but im too hyper to think what...
Well please update soon! *does cart wheel* WHE! XD
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Wow...what can I say? Heh...It's a very rare thing for me to find a fic of this nature that's any good. VERY rare, heh. It was quite compelling, and I had to read it until I got all the way through...now unfortunately, I've read all there is that you've written, lol. Now I have to wait for more. Sigh...now I'm gonna go and mope until you write more, lol.

Though I must say, the way you write about Ed...*shakes head* I don't get it. It's kind of freaky. It sounds like you're channelling him, lol. I'm serious, I know a lot of writers who channel their characters, and you seriously sound like you're channelling Ed...certain comments, like the one about him being from a mixture of the anime and the manga, but not exactly from either one, or his favorite color being turquoise ((though I would have said light blue. That's the color of his aura, which is the reason he likes that color so much)) could only be known that way, lol? That's why I find it so freaky, lol. I already knew a bunch of things you said in this fic that you made it sound like you were just randomly writing them in, but they coincided with things I already knew, heh. At the risk of sounding more insane than I probably already sound, do you talk to your characters? It's just too uncanny. And that last chapter sounded EXACTLY like the way Ed writes, lol. He writes great prose, believe it or not.

Anyway, if you haven't decided to avoid me like the plague for blurting all that out ((I was so curious about it after reading your story that I just had to take the risk of asking you, lol)), feel free to write me and share your thoughts on the matter. I'd be very interested in hearing from you.

In any case, take care, and have a nice day!

Melissa