'And the day after you graduate, you find out some of those bruises weren’t in any way, shape, or form related to martial arts.'

just kinda leaves you hanging, lol, I love the third person thing, so kool, never seen it done before :)

Oh wow, nice. xD I must've burst out laughing about five times (especially that last line).

Ahh, interesting, but I thought you were going to take it further and make a long story of it. That's rather depressing. (Though...the label does say "Complete," doesn't it? Inattentiveness on my part, oops.)

Well, again, there wasn't much concentration on action and movement...maybe show a little more character interaction? But overall, very nice. I love it. :D

Nice, I found a jewel. I love Akira and Takumi's relationship, and I really like your use of second person POV, which is very unique and interesting.
I only have a slight problem with it (and it's only the first chapter, so it might just be an anomaly) and that's that, while you concentrate a lot on Akira's thoughts, her actions aren't so clear. I get a really good sense of her character, but not her face (or "my" face, should I say?), her voice and her movements. That's all (and if I'm disproved later, you can disregard my comment).

I can tell u now that I haven't laughed that much
after reading a fanfiction.

The storie is great, but is it finished?

WIN.

This is the first piece of fanfiction that has made me smile and laugh aloud in a long time. Win SO DAMN HARD I can't even explain it.
Or maybe I can. Your use of the second-person is perfect here. Absolutely perfect. I've never read a piece of work, professional or not, that pulls it off this well. Your flow is extremely smooth, and your pace is exactly where it needs to be.

So yeah. Win, and fav'd. Hard-core.

Well written fic with a unique (and smile inducing) ending. No criticisms here; great follow up.

*snort* Heh. Nice follow-up. Poor, poor Mai. I love that Chie was the one who found out, and I do wonder how she got that picture without Akira noticing. And that conversation she overheard...no wonder she screamed. '-they’re not having sex thank you GOD!' was just so perfectly...Mai. Having to go to the trouble of convincing the school, and then to find out what was really going on... Which leads me to wonder, how /did/ she find out? She just can't win, can she? Squee.
~Naolin

CUTE!!
"You wear the first bruise he gives you like a medal of honor."
i love it!! cute was the first word that came to mind. its like the visa adds with the priceless moment.
$100 for training mats
$50 for ninja suit
getting the first bruise: PRICELESS

'all interest in aforementioned subject'- the aforementioned subject.
With that out of the way- Squee. I always love reading your stories. You seem to have a knack for getting inside Akira's head. Ah, how I envy you. Reason two made me giggle, and when she finally drew her conclusion I wanted to squeal/applaud you for your mastery of her thought process.
~Naolin