This is a dark story because Sigurd is a stark character. I personally would have preferred to have it narrated in the first person instead of the third person as it is now - IMHO the change of perspective would have enhanced the plot. But then, I am most likely just nitpicking ...

As it is it is a very well written story. The battle scenes are a bit to simplistic for may taste: hits are invariably fatal and Sigurd has too much luck all the time (but then he is one hell of a guy all the time ..)

An excellent tale.

Good chapter.

gunny

Good chapter.

gunny

Good chapter.

gunny

Interesting start.

gunny

That was great, but wow. He is having a hard time. ANyway good job!

Tremble Wolf

just awesome-i love this story.

* stand up and clap *


Bravo!

A perfect end for a perfect Christmas! I love it!

This chapter is perfect in so many levels, I can't even begin. I'm speechless.

Great update! Continue! Go Sigurd! Go Kat!
(Sorry, I'm speechless so I babble)

Ja! Das ist gut!
The battle scene is long awaited but worth the wait. The detail is superb and the scenes are not rushed. Sigurd is one complex individual. I wonder if he would become the Clan mechwarrior. The trial should be an interesting read.

getting good, i like where it seems to be going

I like the fight in the end. I never saw anybody described the fight of a half-conscious man as well as this. I can almost 'see' what Sigurd saw. Very nice detail. Sigurd fought with the intensity of a wounded animal, although he was badly outgunned. It's nice to read so much spirit in a man.

Hi good read so far.
now some notes: the vulture is the innersphere name for the clan Mad Dog and it is 60 tons not 65
second the clans d not really take prisoners they take bondsmen/bondswomen who serve the warrior who defeated them or if that warrior does not want them they just serve the clan, bondsmen will be asked questions about who they are where they come from and anything else the clan wants to know, clans WILL use chemical and electrical means of gaining these answers, however a bondsmen will generally be treated well if they behave if they do not the clan may simply kill them,

still a good read hope you keep at it.

Nice Story keep writing don't get discouraged by what Shadrach had to say (Although a Vulture is a 65 ton mech)

Despite what Shadrach said, the plot is very stimulating. You are good in creating human drama, especially the tension between Clanner-Spheroid.

For technical issues, you can go to ppc(dot)warhawkenterprise(dot)com. It's a website created solely for Clanners, and you can find virtually anything about Clan's life.