 Ammonite 2006-10-06 . chapter 1I loved the way this started out, especially the first few paragraphs. For my part, I think you took it a little too far with the drug-running, etc. Forgot about Ellen and all that? It's so easy to get too carried away with a character like this and is much more powerful, I think, if you can reign it in just a little bit. Overall, though, I think it's quite wonderful. |