This was the best chapter yet. I love that Jack is a great older brother. Everybody older brother like him. I loved that you added line from the movie for Spot. That was great. Good job.

Love this story!

"They're treating me like I'm some sort of freak." Boots looked at his brother with the same wide-eyed, scared expression he had when he was eleven and just as confused about himself. "Am I a freak, Jack?"
That really got to me. I could feel my eyes fill-up.

As forward as Les can be with Boots, I love that you’ve made him with a soft and naïve side

“Well, no, I mean, we could do it on the floor,” Les said earnestly.

I’m so glad that you found time to work on this story again.

-"Shut up, Spot, you know you love the ** just as much as I do!"

-"The inn is full," Jack called out, "but if you don't mind the smell, you can pop your kid out in the manger if you want!"

-"I'd better at least be getting sex out of this," he said before their bedroom door clicked shut.

I practically worship your Jack. He's like, such a sex addict, lol. But also a great big brother. I love that quality you added to him.

Okay, other than my love for the Jack you created, I'm head over heels for this story itself. Like, I'm stilled stunned over Loots. That's such an unexplored idea...and...you explored it...so you just climbed like...Newsie Everest or something.

Seriously, you've gotta be one of the best writers on here.

*goes into ecstatic high pitched voice*
YOU UPDATED.
Oh my gosh. Hurray.
"I may be Irish by nurture, but I'm still from the projects and I am not above ** you up and stealing your stereo."
Haha, brilliant line.
Alright, I'm off to read the next chapter.
Yay.

You can't end the chapter like that. Didn't you parents tell you it's not nice to leave people hanging like that? Just kidding. But seriously, that had better not hold them back. Where's Jack when you need him? I love the dialoge between Boots and Les by the way. Luke Edwards has turned into a total hottie. I don't know if you've seen recent pictures, but he has. Just thought I'd bring it up.

Your high school age Boots and Less are marvelous. I love that you have written them so relaxed and comfortable with each other. Most teen couples are nervous and uncomfortable with themselves and their partners. You’ve written them pure and natural and as soul mates.

Their dialogue exchanges are fantastic. The words are free and easy as in an actual conversation. (And I’m still laughing over the "I’m from Queens" line in chapter one.)

You’ve done a great job in writing Linda. I absolutely hate her!

I find it interesting. Most people take the veiw point of people Jack's age. I hope you'll update soon!

Wow.
Loots.
Cool.

I loved the idea that Boots was Jack's younger brother. I absolutely love Boots, and people don't write about him much, so this was pretty spiffy.

Anywho. Cute dialogue. Loved that too.

Oh. And yeah, this line was seriously awesome:

"...the posters for movies like Equilibrium and American Psycho fascinated him. They were all movies that he wasn't allowed to watch, and they all had the same actor in them, who looked strangely like Jack."

You Balehead. =P

I love it!
Less and Boots are a natural. Their innocence and curiosity is refreshing. And I don’t care if I sound corny (no pun intended) I think that their first kiss was angelic.

Your portrayal of Jack as the impatient, obnoxious, I’m so better than you, big brother is marvelous. He really came through for Boots when it mattered. The exchange between them was heartwarming. My eyes filled up at the end.

I don’t remember ever reading Loots before. It’s a wonderful idea that you’ve developed into a very good story. Les and Boots are delightful together.

“Oh, so he's not your real brother. Okay. Is he from Africa?” Les leaned in close to Cornelius, staring him dead in the eye. “Welcome to America,” he said, speaking slowly and loudly. “I hope you like it here.”
Cornelius set his jaw, rolling his eyes. “I'm from Queens.”

I liked that part of the chapter so much that I keep reading it over and over. It makes me laugh every time.

This was a great chapter. I think the advice Jack gave was good. I like the way this story is going. Update soon.

This is cute. I like the idea that you're writing from Les and Boots points of view. I haven't read a lot of stories like this one.

Aw.

Aha. That was pretty much amazing.