I don't know why, but I'm finding it very ** what to comment about this particular chapter. Oh, but as a compliment for one of your compliment. It is better to underdo a hare's accent than overdo it...to which I should state you are not overdoing it. And the ending bit pretty set off my interest radar.

But in all honesty, I have to say this while you're in your editing progress.

"Tyrin was snapped out of his thoughts as he accidently knocked over a passing creature that was heading in the opposite direction."

You repeated the same sentence twice, but there's nothing else wrong with it I can assure you.

Oh...my...god. Why was I not aware of this fic before. (gets slapped in the face with a ruler by SnuffSnuff), thanks, I needed that. My god this fic deserves more credit, and by credit I mean reviewers.

Yeah, regarding your ending notes, yep, we both got similar problems. I've been trying to avoid introducing any creatures in my story with accents, but I believe I can justify that since so many generations passed since the ReLiberation...

4. Yay for privacy! Among other things...(gets slapped again).

5. Which Atlantis? (just joking, but not really)

6. You brought me to realize that I forgot to tell everybody in my story a few of my characters also have hair...not that it matters but...

9. I prefer years as well, it'd suck living only up to fourteen years. So much to do but so little time...

10. But if you don't eat them, they'll populate and take over the entire world. But of course my remedy for that would be fire.

PS. Once you have me reviewing, than that means I'm a regular chapterly reviewer from thereon. See ya.

Agent D

1. Yes I know, in the books, ferrets were bad and rabbits were good along with all the other animals and what not, but remember this is a FAR away place, that doesn’t know of such strict rules and all the ‘bad animals’ and ‘good animals’. There is no ‘vermin’ or ‘good-beasts’ in Rolandia. So everyone can be good and anyone can be bad.

Maybe this belongs at FictionPress.

3. Yes I know, Shilla talked like a normal person instead of saying ‘wot wot’ or ‘jolly’ etc., but technically, this is a different far away place that creatures are different. And since everyone lives together, they all speak the same. Don’t worry, once I get to the Redwall and (cough) other Mossflower creatures (cough) they will speak like in the books and they will act like in the books. (Oh and I suck at hare, mole, shrews, and anything else speech so I will try my best at imitating it but I can’t be 100 percent perfect)

Try putting this up in the forum and asking for help with it. Maybe you'll find beta readers.

5. They are far below ground. Not like right under the ocean. Far below ground and they do have a way to get out. So they are not trapped okay. They have water in a lake, from the ocean, and the place where they live is BIG. Don’t be thinking like the size of a mall, think BIG. 400 creatures have to fit in it with farming and a lake, plus everything else, so think BIG. Think like Atlantis.

No problem with that.

6. Yes animals and creatures here will have hair. Not the little scruff of hair in the middle of their head like some beasts in the books, but real hair. Also, if i write fur it means hair/fur on the body but when I write hair it'll mean only on the head.Get use to it. And a lot of males in the story will have longer hair, usually braided or pinned back to not bother them. Like I said before, new place, new styles, some guys have long hair. (Smiles) P.s- I didn’t describe Cody’s hair well. If you want to know how it looks like, for some odd reason, go to google and type in ‘Treasure Planet’. Jim’s haircut is technically how Cody’s looks like. (Smiles again)

Wait, I thought this was about Redwall, not Disney or some anime.

7. Weather Channel: No, Rolandia doesn’t have rain, snow, hail, sleet, clouds, sky, sun, (They have light though) and anything else in that category but they do have these: dust storms, floods, droughts, and maybe a small tornado or two. And this place is underground so it’s hotter then usual. Think darker skin and fur with very small chance of it getting cold.

How do you get a tornado underground?

8. Ferret’s name: Abbie ; Places name: Redwall Abbey

Hmm? Something to think about.

9. I’m ganna go by ‘years-old’ instead of ‘seasons-old’. (smiles) Though time will be told by seasons.

Either one or the other, but not both, please.

11. PLEASE send Feedback or Reviews!

Don't ** for reviews.

If you can pull off this whole thing properly, it will be to your credit.

Good luck.

Ok, this is really bugging me. no, not your story; I like your story :D the website won't let me log in... "error... error..." grr... anyway, sorry about the anonymous review...

do you like cabbage?

heehee, I know I should keep reading before reviewing, but I refuse. So, if Abbie is a ferret, then won't the Redwallers be a bit wary of her if/when she meets them? She seems nice though. And Shilla doesn't exactly talk like everyone else... she's got a potty mouth!! someone's gotta wash it out with soap (grins)

oh and by the way, ignore all the questions asked in this review, because I'm sure they will all be answered later, but I wanted to submit a review so you'd know I'm here :D I'm watching you... though my special cabbage camera. you may *think* that's just a normal cabbage on the table over there, but it's really a a secret camera!

Well, sorry for not reviewing earlier; busy. Anyway, this is a pretty good fic and only...two reviews? Let me borrow that ruler to slap those who aren't reading it.

~Snuffie

Whoah good story O_O and thats just chapter 1? kant wait to read the rest Twigeh... *smirks and starts laughin from creepy name* anyways, I love the storyline and the characters are good too except ya had some puntcuation mistakes lol. Otherwise good story and keep it up! >_< u ever think of becomin an author.

I've only encountered two Redwall fics where it tells of a totally different timeline and place. One is "Orphen" by Agent D, who uses your 'vermin are good and bad' morals, but in a unique way. And my own fic, which is something else entirely. I really liked this fic and it does need to be noticed by more people than just me. Very unique with the 'hair' thing going on. I am looking foward to more.

~Snuffie