dude that was awesome, nice wording and well set out

Oh, the plot thickens. I like the action in this one, I can belive it. Do you finally make your entrance in the next chapter?

I like this chapter better than the second. Its a bit more detailed, more exiting.

ah! haha they almost all got shot! scary!

aw now that accounts for three friends...does Cathie do anything?? id be cool if the quietest one was the most powerful!!

hehe cool! another super hero is born...so is this your friend ken's thoughts you have put down for him?? or are all in your group writers?? very involving i'd like to read more. on to chapter two!