still waiting for you to update... just twiddlin my thumbs here... any day now... yup... any day...

your stories make me cry, and when i finally get over my tears and go to the next chapters the tears come again! I LOVE IT! :D good work

thank you it was a good one thanks

Severus is well portrayed but I have serious issues with your James Potter - the canon James hates Severus Snape; what's more, in your timeline just a few months before he was taking delight in Snape's public humiliation, and suddenly he's the ultimate kindly brother? I don't buy it. The transition is way too fast.

And the fact that James' parents have heard what their son calls this child they've agreed to take in - "Snivellus" -and have apparently not commented. At the same time you're trying to make your readers believe the Potters are lovely people who consider Severus a second son 5 minutes after they've met him. You revealed that the Potters had heard about Severus Snape from their son - since James hates Snape, none of it will have been good (the implication in your story is that it was good). And how unaware would the Potter's have to be not to notice how damaged Severus is; I can understand their being unfamiliar with the behaviour of abused children - but they wouldn't be anywhere near this oblivious.

Furthermore, there's Dumbledore - that Severus was abused would be blatant to him - and your kindly Dumbledore thinks it's a good idea to put him with the family of his greatest school enemy? Bear in mind that the Shrieking Shack incident has already happened.

Your characterisation of Severus works well, he is believable and his behaviour patterns make sense considering his back story. Very well characterised are his mother and father too. The problem is that those three are the ONLY characters that are like this - everyone else is unbelievable, contrived and highly fake. You need to figure out a way to make them as realistic as Snape and his family. Because of this I find you story difficult to swallow. I hope you can build from this critique - I know I'm not the only one who has expressed this opinion.

I just first have to say that I LOVE your story! It is so amazing! I really hope Severus changes his mind about joining the Death Eaters!

update soon. im putting it on my alert list

great story so far. it must be really hard to write snape like this but i think you've got it down perfect. cant wait for the next chapter

Well, that's a bit better. But he has to be careful because they tend to try to get new recruits to do something incriminating so they won't tell. So, this is the part where I just happen to mention that it's been five months since the last update and some of us will be anxiously awaiting more. Just so you know. So when life lets you, it'd make me happy, but don't worry, I do understand that you have things to do that are more important ;)

I really don't think "Aphetically" is a word. ;) It was up there somewhere, I think a descriptive for Severus turning to look at a book? I'm not sure. Ah well, thought I'd mention it.

If you're concerned that you haven't gotten to The Conversation yet, go read Moments of Bliss. The main characters in that story have been getting to The Conversation for the last FOREVER. Twenty or so chapters it seems like. ;) So, no worries.

Aw, he heard people being nice! Shock! So, just so you know, I would really like this to be an AU where Severus doesn't join the Death Eaters. See, my two cents. And I'm quite curious as to what Lucius did to him. I've read some really awful Lucius's. After all, you really can't approve of a man who would give a piece of Voldemort's soul to a little girl. Even those who say that he didn't know what it was or intend to do that to her, he certainly didn't intend to do anything nice to her with it. Ahem, end tangent.

I thought they were going to get S. an actual wardrobe for school. Did Mr. Potter just get distracted or did they forget or was I wrong?

Don't worry about lighter. Some of us prefer lots of dark, ended with light you know. Angst is my favorite, so don't worry about it, or try to force yourself to change the story just because that's how you think the readers want it. You're the author you write the story. We can, and will, add our two cents, but ultimately the whole story will be better if it comes from your head the way you want it.

I loved your fic! The only thing I thought was a bit off was Mr. Potter's lack of action towards Severus' abuse. I mean, he didn't say anything. I think that anybody else would have tried to pry it out of him "for his own good" and "to help him". A therapist would have been called upon too probably. Anyway, the angst was great and I hope you'll win the award for the best angst fanfic.

I like the plot, and the characters are done very well. You have some minor spelling mistakes, but nothing important... I've added the story to my favourites, and I'm waiting for an update... XD