|Reviews for Close Enough|
| Ranuel 3/21/10 . chapter 1
This made me smile.
| Long Live BRUCAS 8/3/09 . chapter 1
I have said this in other stories I have read. But I love the father/son type of relationship it seems like they have. It was never said but if you watch you can kinda see it in certain episodes. Or how he call him "kid" at times. ( I know he called Amy that too).
| thevigilante15 10/17/07 . chapter 1
| koolkame 4/12/07 . chapter 1
That was nice. I've been exploring unrelated family bonds in my works and i can really appreciate something like this. I always figured those two for that way, father-son.
| Skybright Daye 2/9/07 . chapter 1
I usually try to stay out of the reviews sections of my own works (otherwise it looks rather as if I'm trying to pad my review count!) but there seems to be some awful confusion going on here about my beloved English tongue, and so I really can't help but show my face.
The main confusion here seems to be over the difference between *tense* and *person*, two distinct but important aspects of English verbs. *Tense* is the aspect of the verb describing *when* something happened: He WAS, he IS, he WILL BE or I RAN, I RUN, I SHALL RUN. *Person* is the condition of who or what does the [verb]ing: I said (1st person), YOU said (2nd person), HE/SHE/IT/THEY said (3rd person).
This story is written in the THIRD PERSON PRESENT TENSE, meaning that the basic sentence structure is "He [verbs]". If it were in the SECOND PERSON, as some have suggested, then the structure would instead be "You [verb]."
Things are slightly complicated by the fact that the narrative viewpoint of "Close Enough" is partially subjective, meaning that the story is told by a "godlike voice" focusing on the thoughts and emotions of a single character within the story.
I'll leave aside whether or not this is an effective way to tell a story. Some people like it, others don't. That's a matter of personal choice - but grammar isn't! :D
| grammertarian 2/9/07 . chapter 1
First person: "I said."
Second person: "He says."
Third person: "He said."
I would have to agree with Tiamut (and I'm not sure WHAT junkfoodmonkey means by "it's in present tense, not past tense." We are talking ENGLISH grammer, aren't we?). Second person usually only works from the viewpoint of a character IN the story. Here, it takes the flavor out of what could have been a really neat piece of writing.
| trecebo 12/14/06 . chapter 1
This is very good. Nice internal thoughts, revealing a multitude of things crafted over time. Face and Hannibal seem to have that sort of father/son relationship and this suits very well to that angle.
| Kudoh 11/25/06 . chapter 1
Aw! Love stories like this one. Great little snippet!
| Hecate Triformis 11/16/06 . chapter 1
That was sweet. A few more descriptions of the surroundings and the characters would have been nice but it worked so too.
| soulinlondon 10/19/06 . chapter 1
Just a note of thanks for the story. I have always liked the father/son type relationship between Hannibal and Face. Although there was never any episode about it or one that even mentioned it in the series, I always felt that the relationship was there. I wish that there were more fanfiction about this subject and about how Hannibal and Face dealt with the fallout after Family Reunion. I think you did a good job except for wishing it could have been a longer story, you know , more angst.
| Richefic 10/16/06 . chapter 1
Nice. Succint. Not mushy. Real. In Character. I liked it muchy. Thank you.
| junkfoodmonkey 10/15/06 . chapter 1
I'm not sure what Tiamut means anyway, it's in third person, not second. It is in present tense, which is more unusual than past tense, but I think it works okay here, gives it a sense of immediacy. I don't think changing the tense would have made a vast difference to the impact.
Anyway, I liked it, you made it touching without getting too mushy, just a nice moment between them.
| clairon 10/15/06 . chapter 1
I disagree - I like everything about this. And the view point makes it refreshingly different and more attention grabbing.
Very nice, as Hannibal would say!
| tiamut 10/14/06 . chapter 1
I'm not particulary fond of second-person viewpoints. I think if you had put this in either first-person, or third-person, this could have been a real impressive story. But in second-person, it falls flat.
| giveGodtheglory 10/13/06 . chapter 1