I love how you made Link such a hero!! wow!! you've really out-done yourself, I love how you put EVERY good quality in him, your a GREAT writer! the detail you put in their love is so GREAT it even makes ME blush! WOW!

Holy frikkin crap!! I likes it a lots! Heh, you've got yourself a thumpin' good story, here. I'll never forget Sir Corzan. He's awesome. Next to Link (of course), he's my favorite male character in your story. Then comes King Andreus. He's awesome, too. :P

The sequel calls me! XD

Truly excellent story! I loved your creative plot, I really got into the story! Definitely among the best Zelda fanfictions on the site.

Wow. The plot lines were creative, more than I can say for myself. Great job, though the relaionship with Link and his parents would have been very awkward at first.

Great job,
Melissa :)

i absolutely loved this story... great work!

Aw! Good chapter.

Ruthlage is a bastard. Yeah. Link is probably the best hero ever, along with Batman and Wolverine and those people. And Link has a sword. No perverted thoughts intended. Haha.

I hope soon I can start writing my own Zelda fic. They are all so cool, this one included. I love Link and Zelda together. Who doesn't? Good chapter, finally she's starting to fight. Go her! Heroines are amazing. I hate it when they don't do anything at all ever.

I would imagine that magic would make you dizzy. MATH makes me dizzy. I hate the subject, it needs to die. I'm going to kill it someday. Good chapter.

Fairy princess?! Whoa. What a surprise, it's like, Hey guess what? You're a fairy princess. I would have been like...uh...cool? Haha.

Vaati and Caspian need to go home and sit somewhere. Goodness I don't like them at all. I liked the part where Zelda fell asleep against Link's chest. I wish Link were real. *sigh*

The part where Link tells Zelda that if she's there he'll make mistakes reminds me of Troy when Brad Pitt (I hate him!) tells his cousin the same thing. I liked this chapter. People need to leave poor Link and Zelda ALONE!

Great fic! It was very well written indeed.

Well, a good story i must say. Your subtle refrences to PoP were interesting as well as Windwaker and Four Swords. You did a decent job on combining them all and still keep some continuity. I look forward to the sequel.

Well, for a first fan-fic, that was extremely impressive. However, I've got some hopefully helpful opinions/input for you.

First off, your description of the characters is down-right amazing. You've got them nailed perfectly from the game and the new characters you introduce are quite easy to picture. I have to wonder whether you're an artist with how well you seem to know your character's appearances.

Second off, this story really should have nothing to do with LoZ at all. Don't take that as an insult at all. The fact is, you're obviously writing your own story so using the characters from LoZ is only slowing you down. Since you've already got a background, it creates plot-holes, deus ex machina and a variety of other continuity issues. It would be considerably better if you were to create your own land and your own characters.

Another point, if you ever plan to make this into your own story, you need to add a good deal of conflict. Link utterly obliterated every single enemy you threw at him. Should you ever re-write or edit this, you need to make him some enemies that he actually needs to struggle against. It's no fun when the final boss of a game gets taken apart from the first hit and simply flails at you the rest of the battle.

Your relationships could also use a bit of work. They're far too ideal to seem realistic. Zelda and Link's relationship is far too perfect. There was never any doubt or conflict between them and although that makes for good sap, it gets old and boring very fast. Every couple fights. It's a fact of life. Link and Zelda need to have some sort of problem between them that slowly gets resolved by the end of the story.

Link's sudden relationship with his parents has the same sort of issues. If you suddenly met your parents after 18 years of their absense, can you honestly say that you would warm up to them in two minutes? Even though Link's a genius and certainly not human, that's a little absurd. Link should have been a little more overwhelmed and distant. Their relationship could grow over time, but something that sudden just seems unreal.

This last bit is a combination of my own opinions on girls in stories and could be remedied by changing to AU, but I feel that Zelda was FAR too prissy. This is the same Zelda who lived as Sheik for seven years. She can take care of herself perfectly well even without magic, which, may I remind you, she already had in OoT. (You took it out to give her fairy magic, see the AU plot-holes?) Zelda's character has always been stronger in the stories I've enjoyed. Strong women just appeal to me more. Still, this is all just my opinion.

Let me conclude by reminding you that this isn't meant to be insulting. Your writing is amazing. I'd love to have half of the creative juices that you've got flowing through your mind. However, you're limiting yourself by setting this story in the Legend of Zelda universe. This story was obviously meant for other characters and other worlds. Put it there, and I believe it would be a considerable bit better.

Amazing work, keep writing!
Rex