I enjoyed the ending alot.
You should make a sequel .

First off, let me just say that when I realized there was an actual SasuTenNeji thing going on here, my inner self was crying joyful tears of Gai-esque proportions. Seriously. I think you have a really interesting plot here.

That said, if I may...and this is just me, mind you. But when I look at this story, it seems to me like it would be more suited to being a short multi-chapter fanfic, rather than a oneshot. There's just so much potential material here, because all three of them are probably in very different states of mind in this awkward, awkward (in a good way) scenario. Things like where Neji has been all this time, how the fight between Sasuke and Neji went, even some shameless milking of the awkwardness...it just seems like there is more to be said. So that could be why it feels off to you. But again, I am a humble reader. *bows*

But there are some parts in this story that I just think are golden. Tenten's initial reaction to Neji, just turning around and going back to the kitchen--excellent. And the deadpan "So, who won?" Priceless. And that last twist with Neji's Byakugan was the icing on the cake. :) You have a way with imagery that just rocks.

So, that's my two...*looks back over review*...three cents on the matter. Good job. :)

I don't know why you don't like it, as the reader I love it. I think you have a exalent plot here. I liked the prologe a lot too.

note:Typo
“Now what did I tell you about lying to me?” in asked rhetorically.

I don't know why you don't like it ( not to be rude )
i thought it was really good (agin not to denniy (sp)you not to be rude)it was really good
scratch that it was kick * good ( talk about mood swings)
it dosn't need revising
it was so cute ^_^

Typos:

'"Like there as(!) any doubt," the younger shinobi scoffed smugly from the bed.'

'Orochimary(!) could have managed to convince him to turn his back on the village."'