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Reviews for: The Price of Family
Shavaineth
2006-10-15 . chapter 1
*snickers* I see you added the frog humping son of a ** line. Wasn't expecting that but I like it. The bit with the cord and the mirror is still a little confusing. I'm not sure why a mirror would have a cord attached to it... Other than that and a couple of typos in some of the modified/added sections, it looks good.
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