I really love this! Please update as soon as possible!

Whoa, angst! ><

I'd hope for Saeki, even though he's from GS2.

Interested in posting this on Utsukushiki Sekai?

Anyway, update soon! We do need more TMGS fics out there.

So far, it looks good. At first I found odd the use of the present tense, but then I got used to it (I'm too used to the past tense in stories, but it's just me, and this one was nice). It gives the story a "screen-play" touch, in my opinion.
I find interesting your premise, so I look forward to see what happens with this "not so merry" couple.