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Salamander Hanzo
2009-11-20 . chapter 11
I LOVE THIS STORY
NatalieEGH
2009-11-16 . chapter 10
Kinjakan obviously looked up the meanings of the names. I would like to suggest different meanings. The first being for Rowan. The name is sometimes used for red head especially for boys. I realized boy type Ranma has black hair but it is rarely used for red headed girls.

On Mauve, you suggest the name is Gaelic in origin. Mauve is French and Kinjakan indicates is the source of the color we call mauve. Maeve is Gaelic. It was the name of an ancient queen that fought with Cuchulainn when she stole the great bull of Ulster. (She was a bit of a black widow killing husbands and even her sister to get her husband who she killed. Her sister's son finally killed her.) I do love myths, legends, and the old songs.

Not knowing the meaning of Maeve, I looked it up. I means variously intoxicated/intoxicating, fragile, delicate, and goddess.

Considering it was Tonks that came up with the name, I most suspect Maeve Rowan to mean either intoxicating redhead or redheaded goddess. I truly doubt anyone would ever apply delicate or fragile to Ranma but this is Tonks referring to a beloved so maybe in her eyes she is a delicate redhead, Tonks is definitely the more sexual agressor when Ranma is female.

That being finished, I would like to say you are starting to have more spelling and grammatical errors. It needs to be not only spell checked but the selected word must be correct for the sentence. I know spell checking your own work is difficult and at least for me almost impossible but it needs to be done.

As to the story I am still enjoying it. I do think since you have Severus Snape as a true follower of Tom Riddler, maybe you can do something about your portrayal of Draco Malfoy. Maybe make him less of a 'git' and rather cowardly bully and maybe more … well more.

As to the Ryouga, the fact that he is not an organic bulldozer does not mean he cannot be a superb martial artist. As far as the canon goes, physically Ranma is actually one of the weaker martial artists in the series. What he has going for him is his EXTREME skill and his ki (that does not even come into play for several volumes). If Ryouga takes the training, I am sure he could again become Ranma's equal especially if they work on training his ki. Ranma has not lost his best sparring partner, he need only retrain him.
04farrellr
2009-10-28 . chapter 1
are you going to update soon? this story is really has a deasent plot
raintheblood177
2009-10-20 . chapter 7
you can find the complete wording on you tube when you type in dragon slave or dragon slave english same goes for the giga slave
A-Sheikah-never-dies17
2009-10-18 . chapter 11
i really really like your story!
please update soon =D
i want to see the rest of the new 'students' come to hogwarts.
i love how the story is flowing.
Raining Silver
2009-07-03 . chapter 8
First off...spell check is your friend.
I think the International relations guy swearing an oath without a good reason seemed off.
I also don't think Amelia Bones would have screamed. It's contrary to the politician she is. Neither would Lu.
It did ruin Malfoy though...so I liked that. No doubt with the scene Lu was causing alot of people would have heard it.

I do like how Malfoy got ruined with a snap! Although Ranma demanding a fourth of his estate and money seemed really off. I don't think he would or should have done that. Jail and an actual fine would have done the trick. Although Ranma should have been less rude and formally challenged him to a duel, I do think what he did was in character.
I liked how easily it was to get Harry off since they had no case to begin with.
Since Harry's got diplomatic immunity, Umbridge won't be able to touch him! That is...if she isn't arrested first! Bwahaha!
Malfoy the younger isn't going to like all this. He's definitely going to be going for some vengeance!
For the most part, I enjoyed this chapter.
Raining Silver
2009-07-03 . chapter 7
Interesting story so far, however, there are a few grammar mistakes so you might want to reread your chapters.

What really bugs me is...why on earth is Jusenkyo sharing trade secrets like potion recipes? Even if they are currently allied, they may not be in the future. No government would do that. That's like the US or UK sharing national secrets with each other for no reason. It's only understandable if it's on a need to know basis. And even then, it'd only be fair if The Order gave them secrets in turn.

And this assistance is unofficial correct? The Order is a vigilante group. Not a government. Official help would reflect badly on them since they haven't even notified the government and just basically snuck in.


Sorry. This isn't to be mean or anything, but it kinda bugs me. Other than that, I've enjoyed the story so far.

I especially liked how Ryouga gets turned into a child (he deserved it...that brat) and the prank. I liked how Molly took the sudden change in a stride and yelled at the twins for their immodesty.
Your portrayal of Dumbledore is fine.

I can't wait until the next chapter. I hate the ministry with a passion and I just know that Ranma's going to make a fool out of them. He should challenge them to a duel. It'd rock.
Ranryuujin Omega
2009-06-23 . chapter 11
Yo... when are you going to update? I'm just curious... because it's been over a year, and I really love this story.
annethepyro
2009-06-18 . chapter 8
When you wrote that Fudge said "That is propitious", did you actually mean preposterous? Propitious, according to the dictionary, means "favorably inclined."
Silver-Thirteen
2009-06-14 . chapter 4
Your proofreader failed to notice several sentences lacking quotation. I don't think it's a formatting error, since most others DO have formatting.
Shanami
2009-05-20 . chapter 11
Absolutely love the way that things have developed. This is definitely in my top Ranma xovers now, I can't wait to see the potential hijinks surrounding Ranma's double identity at Hogwarts.

Will we see any more cameos from the Ranma cast?
Lerris
2009-05-16 . chapter 11
Good overall. The undecover pair of Tonka and Ranma-chan is probably the best part so far. The biggest issue with the story I see so far is Ranma is well post Saffron Ranma, and now he is Ranma with a formidable amount of magical power, with the backing of a powerful group. It is possible that things are being set up to be a bit too easy for the good guys..
baduqwa
2009-04-26 . chapter 11
I love the story! Has it been abandoned?
Negima Uzumaki
2009-04-16 . chapter 11
PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE update this fic soon, I just got to know what happens next, also why can't Ranma just use the Naban Mirror to go back in time instead of using the Time Turners?
wert1990
2009-04-16 . chapter 11
please update
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