Sad. Lovin it. I think I watched the series when I was, err...five. I already forgot. I only remebered Tamahome, Miaka and Hotohori. I only remebered that they have a love triangle, forgot everything else. Ha, ha, ha. Still, I loved this because I need not to know anything, I just needed to read the fic.

Quite good, even though it could require some minor grammar corrections.Yet, that is all. It is definitely not crap nor badly written.

In spite of the shortness, it is quite thought-provoking and IC.
You have captured Hotohori's feelings quite well, I believe. The simplicity of the ficlet renders the meaning, emotions behind it even more powerful...The writing itself is beautiful; I really like how you worded some thoughts. You have got potential and that is why I heartily encourage you to continue writing, whether it is something original or fanfic.

All right! I've really never heard of the anime you're writing about (what's it about? Is it any good? Where to find it? Would you call it PG? PG-13?), but I can give you basic English critique. First off, it was actually quite good. I definitely came off with a sad sort of impression. A couple grammar corrections could make it even better, but you really did do a fine job. Second paragraph, third sentence: a little awkward. But that was the only really major thing that jarred the inherent beauty of the writing. Otherwise, it was lovely! I guess it might help if I knew what you were talking about, but there were enough context clues to get the point across. Wonderful work!