hope you finish the next chapter soon! i really liked the story and cant wait to read more! :)
-Han'slilgirl-

Wow, good story you've got going here. I really like having everything exactly from Sabe's viewpoint, and it's definitely interesting to see what could have happened had Sabe been in AOTC. Keep the peeks into Sabe's journal coming. Hope you continue it, so I can see what happens!

Glad to read this long awaited fourth chapter. I can't agree more with Sabé: to have someone playing with your hair is very distracting. Curious to see how Sabe will feature and change the plot of the second episode.

Yippie, you've updated (and I didn't get a notice. . . .)

That aside, this was an excellent update, though not my favrite compared to the previous chapters. There was tension and mild disagreement between our two heroes (during their sparing session), and interal conflict on Sabe's side of the board.


All in all I enjoyed this chapter very much.
Update soon! I wanna know what happens next!
Sakura123

o love it. update soon eh?

yay i'm the first to review! i think so. anyways sabe didn't kiss him aw... i supose that's part of her character, duty before love. i'm enjoying this story more and more. plz write more! :)

Interesting Sabé/Obi-Wan story where both characters are quite forthcoming towards each other. Hope you'll build on that

Wow, I think this is the first SabexObi-Wan story I've read that wasn't a ONE-SHOT (a poem, or complete), which is very few. That aside, I really enjoyed the first two chapters. You really describe Sabe's point of view on things quite well, especially in the Flashback of her Journal describing her interaction with Jedi "Knight" Obi-Wan Kenobi. The second chapter, which details most of the scenes from AOTC was actually quite enjoyable despite the time shift between scenes. They flowed smoothy along with each other, especially when you got around to Introducing Kenobi and Skywalker without all the lengthy dialouge from that particular scene (100% cringe free due to lack of 'Rambling-Anakin' and 'Chiding-Obi-Wan' lines. Yippie!).


All in all I'm enjoying this story so far.
Please Update as soon as you can!
Adios!
Sakura123

chapter 3? i only see ch2 unless you still writting it, anyways plz continue writting i enjoy this pairring and story very much! thanks!

please continue!T_T

I like it! It's very fun, keep up the good work!

Blue Eyes

i like! i like! good chapter

This is a great start... keep writing. I'm interested to see what spin you'll put on the sabe-obiwan relationship. - AKB

Yay! A new sabewan story! I'm working on one just after the Attack of the Clones era, and I thought I might be the only one left :-).

You have a lovely writing style, vivid but not too wordy or ostentatious, and I like that you cut right to the story with only a minimum of exposition. It always makes me yawn when a fanfic writer gives the readers a two or three page introduction to a character we know all about. I thought the journal was a nice way of bringing in the backstory without overwhelming us with it. And the place where you started the story is a good choice too...most of us readers should know what's about to happen on the landing pad, and I'm sure I'm not the only one who is eager to see Sabe's reaction when she finds out.

The only critique I have is small; the tense seems a little funny at the beginning. In some sentences it seems like it is going to be written in present tense, and the next you switched back to past tense. But otherwise, I'm intrigued. There are so few Sabewans written during this time period. Can't wait to see your next entry!