Wow, very well written, even though I have never read anything by C. S. Lewis this is very well written and you get a good feel for the characters. The only thing that I would change would be to get rid of the author's notes placed within the story to allow it to run more smoothly.

A great job. I hope to be able to read more from you.

By the way, this is Lady_DreamWriter from fictionpress in case you were wondering who I was. Hopefully, if you happen to have the time, you will like my fanfiction as much as you seem to like my original work!

Well, it was well-written...and you did hit some good points...but I'm not a fan of this pairing. Good job on everything else, though!

This was good, but why make it a one-shot? You could've easily made it more detailed and a multi chapter. Frankly, I was bored. For a story like this to work you've got to make your readers doubt Jadis' cold nature. Establish several scenes where she struggles with her feelings for Ginnarrbrik. Make her seem more..."real"... I couldn't really grasp the idea of her truly having feelings for him without taking some real time to doubt them. She's got to at least consider it to convince herself it cannot happen and a good writer (which I think you are) would show that. Even Jadis can't be all ice all the time.

My suggestion would be to get some help and rewrite this as a multichapter, or let someone else expand the idea. You never know, it might make a good choice.

Weird.

ong. lyk wow.

That was pretty good! And you finally got something up! Maybe you could do a one-shot, same pairing, but in Ginarrbrik's POV. Was that really his name, though? I thought it was shorter.

Meh. Wha'ever. Love ain't easy. I know. ;-;

Interesting pairing. I never saw it, and I agree with your author's notes-ew, and ew again. That aspect of the story had me laughing pretty hard. Good show. :)

Aww, it cute! My Jadis Muse is currently in the bathroom throwing up her dinner, but, hey, who cares! Really interesting pairing, good job on strutting on out on that creative limb. Hee hee...the mental image...he only comes up to her waist...
More one shots on this pairing? Please??
~Doc