It's been a long time since you posted this, and I've nothing but shame to show for it. How unfortunate that I hadn't noticed this sooner...It might not mean anything now, the essential vigor from writing your work has faded...has it not? Only one reveiw in all this time, and yet surely this is something to be read and admired. It is a magnificent notion, and I am quite fond of the overall effect you've given me. I apolgize only for not have read this sooner...

Surely you are one who holds great talent, and I wish you the best of luck with writing in the future. I hope that more people will eventually stumble upon this, as I have, so that I might return one day to find you with more reveiws. It is sad, I know, to have people read and not review (or worse, not read at all...), so I will tell you this: I deeply admire you and this story, for each portrays great talent and thought.

My many thanks and praise for such a wonderful work,
Kyuseisha no Hikari

I love one-shots as much as anyone, but this is still a bit too un-satisfying for a one-shot. Good idea though, and I'm not saying it's bad, but it would be better if you tried to explian in there somewhere what it was that made Krad act like he hated Dark so much. A bit better vocabulary could also add a different dimension to the story. I know it's tedious to use big words for something you're doing for fun, but it makes the story all that more introspective and deep so that you're likely to get a better reaction.
It's so sad how no one else has reviewed this, but that's the problem with one-shots; you either get 900 reviews or none. *sigh* I hope my contribution'll cause some other's to review, cuz the more reviews you get that offer help, the better your story will become.