The line, "Jareth doesn't look like an evil smurf" was funnier than it should have been and made me laugh louder and longer than it was supposed to!

The last line made me "Aw" out loud!

awesome Jareth really knows how to push Sarah buttons lol

I LOVE THIS. The backround story and Jareth's POV...sigh Great Job.

Hi, have to say that I am loving your story so far, I'm addicted. very well written and the way you wrote is keeping me interested in the story. I love Labyrinth and I wish more ppl wrote fanfiction 4 it. jareth and Sarah rule! great Job.

Totally, totally awesome and leaves me scrabbling to get to the next chapter as quickly as possible.


*here, and in one of the previous chapters, "patients" should have been "patience".

This is so, so awesome, I can't even go into detail about how awesome it is simply because I'm that impatient to get to the next chapter.


*btw, "chocked" should be "choked", "its'" should have been "its", and I think in the last chapter (and about two other chapters before that) you spelled "intentions" as "intensions". Other than that, the chapters so far have been practically free of mistakes. :d

what an ending!
...now onto to sequel...well, on to it tomorrow, because I have to go to bed now, its past three in the morning...and yes, i do have work tomorrow. ^^
good story though, really!

-rayko

interesting development. Actually, i like that you took the story this way, really intriguing.

-rayko

“In Which the Author Needlessly Tortures Jareth, Again”?
more like,
“In Which the Author Needlessly Tortures the Readers with the Beginning of a Lemon, Again.”

i gotta say, i like your style of foreplay writing, but you keep cutting their interactions short, understandable for the plot, but damn frustrating for the reader who just wants to see them jump each other already :P

-rayko

...thank you for the erotic dream sequence. Lately I've been encountering fanfics that are rated M but should be rated T... now while this chapter feels like it's still borderline T, it gives me hope that your story is one that will soon live up to the rating M. In any case, it was a well written scene :)

-rayko

Since you state at the end of this chapter to review, i shall once again review.
I liked this chapter a lot. I especially liked the line "...and she could sense the ebb and flow of his feelings mixing with hers." That is great flowing imagery, it comes out feeling like waves of energy instead of water, which is otherwise the usual connotation for ebb and flow; I like the effect, nicely done. Once again I'm getting a foreboding sense when you mentioned the mortal prince there, watching and thinking... and the possessed Toby was frightening.

-rayko

I like the inclusion of a family for Jareth. His father seems a nice temperate man at present, and his mother sounds like a would-be doting grandma if Jareth would provide her with the grandchildren. I'm eager to see how his brothers compare in personality.

oh, and to fix on a typo from my last review. I typed "1,0" but for some reason the computer shortened it to "10" so here I repeat: a thousand reviews, awesome congrats! :D
and now, here's a thousand and one.

-rayko

you claim to hate this chapter, but I thought it came out rather well. It doesn't seem like dreg to me at all. Perhaps as a writer on a quest for the perfect story, you are not satisfied with your work, but do not overthink it; the chapter flowed well and worked to move the plot nicely along.

oh, and by the way, I do believe this review puts you up at 10. Congratulations!

-rayko

ah, a shared dream is an interesting twist, works well with the magical connection you have developed for them. I enjoyed Toby walking in on them sleeping together at the end, it was hilarious. Poor boy.

-rayko