Oh h h h...i thought it actually had cabilline in it... you know i cant find a single fic with her in it?? *sigh...* i guess ill just have to wait...

anyway, ...hm...foaly lili... *shudder* sorry...not my thing. TOTALLY not my thing actually... but, ignoring the fact that i dislike the pairing immensely... it was a good story. you wrote it well, and it had a good plot line to it. poor foaly... *gives him a hug* stupid lili... *growls*

eh, yeh...anyway...

really great job, despite the pairing. (but according to the an down the bottom, you endevor to write outlandish pairings...you succeeded. ;p) well written and good plot.

If you felt like it...you could write an ACTUAL cabilline/foaly story... *looks hopeful*

Love Bundi

Ooh shiny!
I love the pairing!! (I like Root/Foaly myself..note to self, write a fic for it) Odd ships are awesome...
I always thought this Caballine character was a bit shady, she never actually appears in the story or anything, there's just references... So in my little theorizing world this fits!! Haha.

But that was awesome! I really enjoy your style. And you did a great job of first person (I'm not a fan of writing in it myself)

Kudos!

arie

A secret affair...that's not so secret...but yet it is...hmm...

Ah assumptions. One of the worst things you can do to a person. But you can't help it. It's natural.

Another horrible thing is feeling as if you don't deserve your lover, as if their too good for you. Poor Foaly.

But I don't get the whole him being a pet thing. Would you please explain it to me?

And it's okay to post a lot. I post every week. But I guess that's what happens when you write a series instead of oneshots.

And I like the beginning part. Somehow it reminds me of that Santa Claus song. He sees you when you're sleeping, he knows when you're awake.(Whoa. That's creepy. Santa's a stalker.)

Oh, I like this! I really like reading Foaly ships because I find them interesting (I just realized how perverted that could sound...) and this is really quite unique. I read it twice before I got it ('cause I skimmed the first time - I'm doing NoNoWriMo too and I'm kind of semi-procrastinating as much as possible) and it is really very insightful and all those sorts of wonderful things I have no words for at the moment.

I never even thought of putting the two together, and I also thought it would be a little bit too unrealistic, etc, but the way you wrote it I thought made it a whole heap more possible - although I still think Holly and Foaly are made for each other ...

Interesting. I've always been curious about how people pushes some boundaries to bring together unlikely people, and I have to say you pulled it out nicely. There's a few typos, though:

"I’d have expectedthis"

"She’s far too me beautiful for me"

"She tickled me under the chine" (it's 'chin', right?)

But that aside, is a good piece. A bit defeatist, but not overdone. :)

Ooh, very nice idea. I always did assume Caballine was a centaur... *sniggers* Don't you just love the name 'Caballine' though? Especially when you say it in a Texan drawl (yes I'm terrible and first encountered Artemis Fowl via the medium of audiobooks, in which Foaly is inexplicable Texan, and Mulch is inexplicably Scouse... ahem) Very nice work though, and I thought the first person POV worked really well. Oh, and Happy Birthday for yesterday!

I must say, that was a little strange. However, you did manage to pull it off, with the introspectiveness of it. The love and the hate makes it quite interesting. (and I totally have nothing productive to tell you)

Alvin