Reviews for The best day of my life

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Moonlight Petal 2007-09-17 ch 1,	abuseThis story is so cute!
franchi 2007-09-02 ch 1,	abusepuasluoma! it was a really good story! i really liked it! I think that if you are more stories you are going to become a better writer! One thing though, in my opinion you should put quotation marks on your dialogues cuase it can be confusing some times. but besides that, your story was good!
takari-sasusakulover 2007-07-08 ch 1,	abuseSweet story. That's really amazing.
saruwatarikoumiko 2007-06-23 ch 1,	abuse=') That was so sweet! Just a little note though, frizz does not mean to be cold. I don't know if it was a typo, but the word for it is actually freeze. Anyway, other than that, I loved how you used Kari's POV and ... and... AGH everything was soo cute! You MUST continue writing more fics! Please? ~Koumiko
HopeandLight111 2007-05-27 ch 1,	abuseWow that's a really good story! Usually I don't like short storys but yours is really great!
Angel Dying Red 2007-05-22 ch 1,	abuseAww, that is so so cute!! I love the idea.
Steph-DaughterOfTheNite 2007-04-27 ch 1,	abuseGreat Story
puasluoma 2007-04-05 ch 1,	abuseaww!
kathlaida-princess 2007-03-22 ch 1,	abusewow, it was so beautiful! you really did great! keep up the excellent work!
Yami Kamiya 2007-03-01 ch 1,	abuseaww, this is so good. i want to be Kari
Half Kracker 2007-02-11 ch 1,	abuseI stopped coming here and well, now look where I end up at? Anyway on your fanfic... You have a wonderful sense of dialogue that's for sure, though you could use a slight bit more description. I know that it's hard to put yourself in a characters point of view, but you always have to remember when doing that you see everything that character sees and nothing else. Sometimes placing yourself into a characters point of view is the hardest thing to do and it also depends on the person as well. Also, I think that you could have lengthened your story out as well. Instead of making this story into a one shot you could have made it into a two part story. Like for this chapter you could have talked about T.K and Kari's childhood. How it was like, how they actually met and go from there. The second chapter could be when their older and that's where they stand today spot. I know that may sound a bit more complicated which trust me, it isn't as complicated as it sounds. Look at Hikari Kamiya Takaishi's fanfic called, "Just a Little Prayer". The fic is based on T.K and Kari's younger life. Not really evolving from younger to older but still... you could possibly do something like that. Anyway, I still believe you have done a wonderful job on your first fanfic. I think that you shouldn't stop at just one and that you should keep going on from there. Remember, there are a lot of fans and authors out there that has faith in new authors. ^.^ Even myself am a believer, because I was one of those authors that think they absolutely "suck" at writing. With that said, please keep up the excellent work and keep writing. HK If you have any questions please feel free to contact me through a PM. I'll be more than happy to help. ^.^
Thegreatestnameever 2007-01-29 ch 1,	abuseI loved this story. It was fantastic. Is frizzing freezing? I'm sorry i just had to ask that.
onlyIcanRULEtheWORLDlikeIdo 2006-12-19 ch 1,	abuseawesome story! i love Takari/ you can easily guess... cool story again!
VAMPS.04 2006-12-16 ch 1,	abusei love your story! please make some more... i promise i'll review if you make... good job! it's better than mine... TAKARI FOREVER! >_
Arisa Aihara 2006-11-19 ch 1,	abusethis is...really an unuasual way to write...but nonetheless! IT'S GOD! XD

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