This is a Great start to a book that i would certainly like to read more about. keep going and posting more chapters this is amazing stuff.

First Chapter

Gotta admit you have skill with words. This was concise, entertaining and a truly thrilling opening. I don't say this lightly when i expect a great story.

Finally, a fan-fic with no spelling mistakes. Some sentences appeared to be left trailing, but when writing about situations such as this the author's mind does tend to wander ahead.

It's nice that you have some real-life experience (even if just in the correct use of terminology).

10/10 for chapter 1

Good, except that Mexico's language is Spanish.

Good and interesting chapter...

You were fast... I'll go ahead and read the next chapter.

Nice...

When's the next chapter coming?

Not bad! Will this eventually cover the Las Vegas plot?