That was very nicely written. I enjoyed all the inner monolgue. But it felt incomplete. Good job with what you have. :)

that was really really good. it's very in character and very realistic. i loved it. it's going in my favourites.

Aww... sweet story.

wow...that was great! please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please please dont let this be a one shot! its gota continue!
FLiSS
ps i dont usually leave reviews this long but hopefully it got the message accross

aww so cute! continue!