A great fic. Truthfully I like this better than the ending in the book...

Thank you! The end of the series was painful. my brother and i spent long hours telling stories about how it should have ended. I wanted to write them down, but by the time i got around to it, i had forgotten them. thank you so much for turning the ending around, i absolutely loved it.

You know Stroud is going to do a continuation of Bartimaeus right?

It was definiely good, and funny too.

thanks for writing this i like this ending alot better thought the books were so great i bought 2 copies of all three but it seemed like the author got bored at the end and decided to end it. thanks for giving these books the ending they should have had

I have read a few of the other alternate endings, but none are as close to Stroud's writing style as yours. It really helps me get over the incredibly sad ending to Ptolemy's Gate. Keep Writing.

I always loved how, in the Nouda scene, Barty lies to Nathy about the wound. When I read that, I crowed to myself, "See?! He DOES care! Muhahaha!"

"This way, I may get to keep a master I’m starting to like for the few remaining years of his short life." That reminds me: Barty knew Ptolemy would die one day, and he still allowed himself to develop affection for him. Aww, love (platonic or otherwise) hurts, doesn't it, Barty?

Huh. Making him lose an arm was an original idea. I guess if he's going to face off against an ages-old omnipotent demon and win, he had better lose SOME limb, or he'll come across as, I dunno, God, or something. My great-uncle was born without an arm, and I still don't see how he manages...

"She's my girlfriend!" Lol.

EK! "Will you come to our wedding?" Aw. I'm sitting in my mother's office, and she keeps on looking over at me and saying, "You're making squeaking noises." This is why. This is so... fluffy. It makes me feel all warm and happy inside. Lol. Anyway, I can picture Barty being at the wedding and making some catastrophe happen, like the doves going into Kitty's veil or the minister having a book written in heiroglyphics, or something.

"Nat can read anything like it's written in English". Yes, that's our little Nattles, resident genius.

Finally, Barty gets to be free... ish. I'd be jumping for joy if, after 5 millenia of slavery, I knew I wouldn't be summoned again. Still, being in The Other Place seems a little boring, at least to me.

"might even have felt proud of the boy..." Aw! Barty, you do care! I love how Barty refers to him as "boy"; it just makes him seem really old, which he is.

Nathaniel as a dad just kind-of cracks me up, especially because he's just SO YOUNG. I mean, he acts quite old, but by Ptolemy's Gate, he's only seventeen. Ek! At least Kitty is older and has more sense, huh? I can picture Nathy trying to teach his five-year-old son or whatever how to, say, read Coptic or something, and freaking out in a very mellow way when he can't get it right. IDK. I'm not a parent and I don't plan to be one, and so...

Yes, Ptolemy's Gate was a very solemn ending. I don't think it would have been satisfying if he'd lived, though. I think the moral is supposed to be that if you're going to do a great thing you have to be prepared to die. Or something. Lol. What do I know?

Ek! You live in Japan. That's so far away (at least from where I live, the unbelievably hot state of South Carolina). Isn't it amazing how we can communicate like this? Lol. Still blows my mind every time. In any case, great fic, and I hope my review did you justice. :) Very fluffy and heart-warming. It helps sooth some of the RAGING ANGER I have towards Jonathan Stroud (okay, I admire the way he ended it, too), for PG.

Man, this ending satisfies me way more than the book's did. Great job. I can totally see this happening in the actual series, as you didn't make anything up, it wasn't a perfect escape for Nathaniel (his arm is gone), and knocking up Kitty to make her younger makes sense. Loved your first fanfiction ever.

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I finished PG yesterday and I must say I wish it had ended like this... Or indeed, at least Nathaniel should have kissed Kitty before he died. I mean the end didn't fit the rest of the series. Yours did, though.
Thanks for takin' the time to write this I needed it after what Stroud wrote.
--TG

Wow, I love it! That was awesome! Now I don't know what to say... write :D
I've been looking for Bart/Nat friendship story and didn't find any, and now I found this masterpiece :)
Please, can you write another story about Bartimaeus? (puppy eyes XD)

that was really really good. i have to admit, i felt the same way about ptolemy's gate, and i wish he had wrote it like this! but it was awesome, you sounded just like him.

this is a better ending than stroud's and i comend you. you did this very well and i love it.

You're relly good.Keep going,cos there is just not enough natx bart out there,and I'm talking about FRIENDSHIP.I appreciate the sort of stories which they get intimate but not as far as yaoi.I love you!

I LOVED this. I hated Strouds ending of Ptolemys Gate, but this one was uber cool. Thank you for not killing off Nathaniel. He was my fav character and I had 2 skip a day of school because I was so sad when I read the end of the book. Thanks for writing this!

YES! YES! YES! Reading this makes me want to dance around with joy! Oh man, your ending was right on--a not-perfect-but-perfect-all-the-same sort of thing. I never felt too good about Nathaniel dying (and leaving Kitty all alone) either. This is wonderful.