I loved how you paced this story, it was very hard to pause even for a minute just so I could get on to the next chapter. It's been so long since I've read a mystery/thriller of this caliber here in the HxR fandom, I'm just glad you finished this one already as I think the suspense will kill me just by waiting for the update (and now that there's a sequel, I think the possibility is still there =D) This is a great fanfiction title, well thought out. You deserve all the praise for it.

Where's the sequel? Too bad you had to end it like that.:)

wow. That was long. But I really enjoyed it. This makes the Gundam pilots real and consistent to their actual characters rather than the OOC's that are more common. I couldn't wait for the ending but you make it so that I couldn't stop reading it. Kudos! I look forward to the sequel.:)

I LOVED this story!!

Sorry dear, but this just sucks.

It does not suck because of your attempt to make a different kind of ending, it's just that you got terribly lost in the process of getting there. This fanfiction loses all sense while trying to fulfill your blind need for a sad outcome. The result is that the plot starts promissing and turns into complete boredom.

Alternative and surprising endings are always welcome, as long as they are creative and inteligent.

You lost your time creating this nonsense plot (and probably thinking it was brilliant), got lost while writing it and made me lost my time reading and giving you credit word after word expecting this fanfiction could be saved.

I thought I'd review this as well, and leave you another not-so-subtle reminder to update the sequel while letting you know what I like about this one:

1. Your characterization of Relena--She tends to be over-simplified as a Heero-obsessed saint, but you really brought her to life. She's still truly "good," but her thoughts about everything from spandex to cheap hotels describe a more complex, real, and flawed "good" person. Her feelings and actions towards Heero--her obsession, pride, and spunky, teasing stubbornness--are also very fun to read.

2. The moment at the gas station where Heero brushes Relena's hair out of her face is one of the most subtly romantic I've come across. I can hate overly saccharine fluff, and that moment was perfect: sweet and understated (though of course, it's somewhat recontextualized by Heero's betrayal.)

That's all! Well done! (I usually have a few more critical afternotes, but for now, at least, I'm still basking in this story's glory.)

So, um. I'm not sure if I like this fic or not. I'm loving Relena's characterization and POV. It's great writing and the story has me at the edge of my feet. But I don't like possibly traitor Heero!

Okay. I am going to be honest. I hate you right now as a "happy-ending-loving" person because you ended it so horribly ;__;
You're so cruel. But then I checked and saw that you had already published Over the Edge, and woppe, I'm loving you again xD
I hope that Relena is miraculously alive and that Heero did not actually kill her.

I don't know why too but Relena seems a little bit selfish in this fic. She mostly cares about "living" and actually believing in peace. But I love how you portrayed the "fun" side of her character. xD

In addition, I also admire your vocabulary. Wow, I think I needed to look in atleast three times to check a few big words that you threw in this fic. Or that could just be me being stupid xD

Well, I'm off to check "Over the Edge". You did a fantastic job on this fic though. I think suspense is your area of expertise.

AH! This is so intense >_>

Something does seem off about Heero. It's so suspicious. I hope that he is not evil and he has a very GOOD explanation as to why his name is on that darn list.

and LOL @ “That’s a good reason to be a gay man.”

xD

OMFG. xD YEAH. You definitely COULD write a fic. And not just any fic. One that has a lot of twists and surprises in it. ARFGH! I'm frigging loving where this is going.

Hahah. Relena finally got Heero on that last moment. xD
The poor smexy soldier can't say anything back to the smart politician.

Holy crap. So that's why. I think I'm beginning to understand it now. Your plot is brilliant and I walked right into your clever plot xD. Nicely done.

LMAO @ "So… Finally, Heero shows up to save the day in that perfect soldier of hawtness way."

That rhymed xD
Well, this action-packed fic is sure picking up my interest.

I admit I'm pretty confused. Heero could've easily snuck out the disc that he gave her. He's a frigging genius when it comes to stealth for pete's sake. And what was the point of setting off the alarm? If he had taken the disc and replaced it with a fake one, why still set off the alarm and risk being caught?
And lastly, I doubt Heero would actually risk Relena's safety like this. His actions need to be explained >_>