Very good! A powerful last sentance. And a wonderful writing style that I think really captures the attenion.

Keep up the great work! =D

Yay, finally got time to read fanfiction again! Hope you'll have more time to write again soon - real life sucks when it gets in the way of fanfiction :D lol.

This had a powerful last sentence. Kind of ambiguous, which is always cool for an ending. Nice job!

Pretty good, I liked it! Reading through the lines is key here, I guess. Keep it up!

Ooh, great ending paragraph! Very striking and memorable.
Great job!
Hope you have more time to write soon. :)

Oh, I like this. I'm in a faze where I like to read really short fics that a what I call 'fill in stories'. I like this one. I could believe that it could have happened ... not that you write anything that couldn't have.

I think you could be rolling in your pool of money from your best selling series AND writing fanfiction for nothing for the sake of your fans!

Keep it up. Looking forward to more Lily/Severus!

I love it! Fantastic work, as usual.
I thought this was really well done, and as I hadn't been seeing much out of you lately I was really excited to see the author alert in my inbox!

I've updated Rising from the Ashes, if you'd care to take a look :)

Interesting. Very good character actions. I liked how you portrayed Severus. Older than his years asnd such.

Lovin' It,
TMAL