I KNEW it!! It ends abruptly!! >_< You're so mean!! You write a good story like this, and then all of sudden you leave it!! Shame shame SHAME on you!! PLEASE update! I'm begging you!! I promise I'll forgive you for your abandonment is you update!! All will be forgotten if you just update!! UPDATE UPDATE UPDATE!! PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE!! I'm putting this on alert and I hope you update ASAP! As in NOW NOW NOW!! PLEASE!! I'm desperate!! PLEASE!!

What time is this supposed to be set in again? I'm loving it so far though!! One thing I will say I'm not loving or even liking AT ALL is how I know it will end abruptly! It hasn't been updated since 2006 which is abandonment! You should be thrown in jail for reckless abandonment!! You should also be ashamed of yourself for abandoning this good story!! I'm very irritated at your abandonment right now, but it shan't keep me from telling you how much I'm loving this! Which is true! It's very intriguing! I'm guessing Jack is supposed to be Charles, though I don't remember him having had a lot of girlfriends...nevertheless, I love it!! Please update!!

interesting story... please update soon...

cool story ... although i think it would be good if you put sophie's point of view as well... can't wait to read more...update soon!

I love the french touch! that is such a unique twist!

hello, great chapter but i dont realy understand where it follows on from the previous chapter.. if you could fill me in that would be useful.
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This looks realy interesting! I love stumbling onto well written stories

I like this very much. Oddly, I don't really want a Lizzy pov. There's way too much of that in all the other stories. It's Darcy we don't see much from. Please update soon.

I love that last part, speaking in French. Actually I love the whole thing. Except the dialogue grammar. For example: "No, it's who she is." Jack explained. You should change the period to a comma: "No, it's who she is," Jack explained.

Great story, and the characters aren't confusing.

Okay, now lovely new chapter...will all updates be this quick? Now, is it since Sohpie's not around, Andrew doesn't feel the need to remain "changed/reformed" or is it that she's not around to tell him when he's being an arrogant **? (Both maybe?) and Does Jack know about Andrew's past with Sophie? Is that why he was hesitant to mention Fiona?

I love Andrews attitude, It's probably my favorite aspect of your fic so far...and I loved Sophie in the flashback! and I love the name Fiona...(can't wait to "meet" her) and i like Jack and Emily too...Will we get more of Emily? and does Emily know Sophie? and I'm guessing you'll tell us later, but does Sophie know about what happened to Emily? (about the Wickham character?) Did Andrew tel her after his failed 'proposal'

as far as POV's go, I don't think you NEED Sohpie's...After all P&P is originally all in onee (Lizzy's) POV, so having the whole thing from the Darcy perspective would be quite nice. However thats not to say, Lizzy's POV wouldn't be appreciated...It's always easier to understand why characters do what they do when we can get into their heads...and it's not like you have you have to do it continually...You could just do a few chapters interspersed throughout your fic, with her POV...OKay, so all that really means, is that I'd be happy either way:D

I really like this beginning. I too am worried that Andrew hasn't learned his lesson on pride and arrogance from the first refusal but I will be patient. He does mention it in this first chapter.

I am on the fence about Sophie's POV - I find it refreshing just getting one POV, esp. the male's. I think it may be more interesting to keep it at only Andrew's POV.

I look forward to more.

Hi there!
So far, so good. I like your writing style, and the story seems interesting. I'm looking forward to reading more.

So I love your idea (and I can't wait to read more!)...I don't think I've seen anything like it before, but it'll take time to get used to the names, but I don't see that as a issue. So from the way you've written the prologue, this sounds like you'll be using flashbacks to cover the P&P events...Or am I just imagining things?

I loved the first line, about men not having one's that got away...It's definitley attention getting. And I have to say I can't wait to meet Sophie!

However I do see a problem, and I hope you won't be offended by anything I say.

Alright now, Here's my issue...after Hunsford doesn't Darcy reign in his pride? I mean Elizabeth's refusal instigates a change he makes within himself...your D, (Yates) doesn't seem to have gone through that...He still seems like an arrogant prig...like her refusal didn't do anything except deny him something he wanted...

And (this is more a question that anything else) just by the act of his first proposal, he's overcome his concerns with class differences...He says they don't matter (he wouldn't have proposed anything otherwise)...so when your Yates mentions his friends and family "wouldn’t take kindly to a Yates and some girl from the middle of nowhere" is that a defense mechanism?
or is this where you're diverging from the original storyline?

Or will all this be cleared up with forthcoming chapters?