 God's Gal 2008-04-22 . chapter 4Chat speak in a story, not a good idea. You've got a good plot, but the typing could use some help. |
 YaoiYaoiYeah 2007-08-29 . chapter 7This fic is very sweet!
I love these Fluffy feelings between them.
The kiss on the cheek is the best. |
 Tefnut Talvi 2006-11-08 . chapter 6thanks for fixing the last chapter. Good ending |
 Agent of the Divine One 2006-11-07 . chapter 7There are many grammar mistakes throughout, but I thought that the story was interesting.
I just wanted to point out that the last chaper was merely a repeat of the previous one.
I look forward to the final chapter being posted soon. :) |
 El Queso de Malicioso 2006-11-07 . chapter 1I want you to reread just one of your chapters. If you do, I won't have to list the massive quantity of errors you made. About the only good thing I can think of is that it seems like a good premise. I apologize, but you wrote as if English was your second language or something. If such is the case, I understand and am sorry. |
 Tefnut Talvi 2006-11-07 . chapter 7The last two chapters are the same.But good story. |