0_0 Hilarious.

There are no words to describe the story but let's give it a try:

(searches on google "Words to describe a story")
Wonderful
Incredible
Nice
Nifty
Epitome
Ravish

in short WINNER!

omg you did an awesome job
lol i loved it
real talk

The spelling slipped a bit on this one. "one too many tail from Kakashi", "She had a suspicion hat", "he needed to be a goods as he", "before he every considered", "placing them o the blanket", "cold and flue season", "have you change you opinion", and "out on date with me" (the last two might just be the character being ungrammatical in his nervousness of course). They're not major and I understood your meaning, but you may want to work on that.

Heh... I can't help but feel that the listing of various guys is a mild dig at fanfiction pairings you've seen.

Overall, I liked this next installment. And I was waiting for Naruto to get his comeuppance regarding changes and being willing to change himself... very well done.

I love it! The story is hilariously funny and I love what you're doing with the characters. Sai's constant quoting of the various dating books... I wonder if it's a bad thing that I actually recognize most of the material, but it's great how you manage to make him initially seem completely relevant to the conversation and then gradually introduce it getting more and more off-sync showing that he's just regurgitating material.

Closest I can come to a criticism is that you do have a few inadvertent line breaks, mainly in the middle of some of Sai's speeches. Och... I wish I could make the review more well-rounded, but as it is, I can only really say good things.

hahahaha just like what shino said: PRICELESS

Brilliant, absolutely brilliant. While chapter three wasn't as good as the others it still stood up against most other stories I've read. The ending was hilarious and was probably the funniest thing, though it's close with Sai's pickup lines.

Awesome Fic man!!

NYA! Dave-kun!! That was awesomez! *hugs* LOLZ BTW I read your fanfic, You Can't Always Get What You Want. Me likez the part where Hinata-chan slaps Naruto-no-baka. ^^ ...:( Why haven't you written any new ficcies? You've obviously got raw talent. ^/^' Anywayz, I love the way you make things...atypical. Usually, Naruto simply spends time with her and falls for her. Although that is most certainly the case in a lot of your fanfictions, you mix it up a little bit. I can't usually find a fanfiction this HIGH-LARIOUS that has NaruHina in it. She always ends up finding her true inner Hinata. (...I can just imagine a white-outlined Hinata swooning after Naruto kisses her, or saying CHA! Lolz) Best Quote EVER:

"You're not my type," Shino said pushing the other boy to the floor. He wished that a girl had fallen there instead, since he personally felt that the only way he would ever find a souldmate was if Fate could drop one in his lap...

XD HAHAHAHA! O.O I mean, poor Shino! T^T

GTG, Dave. Me be seein yew later. =P

I'm Still LOLing...
-Sora

lmfao

I tried, but I couldn't get past the scene with Lee trying on new clothes. Many other things before that was hard to read.

On a different note, out of the stories I've read with the Hinata/Naruto pairing I think yours is probably one of the better ones. Possibly the best, but what with the rest of the story being as it is I can't really say.

You're a great author, you just don't write what I want to read. Have fun writing whatever it is you'll be writing next.

I had a hard time getting to the fun part. Romance in literature of any kind doesn't interest me. I'm glad I pressed on, Sai was hilarious. I may even watch a few more episodes of the anime, just for the fillers and to see some more of Sai. Can't remember what became of him, he's not present in the manga now at least.

First things first, the beginning was just odd. It could've fit in a future chapter, but as the first chapter in a story? It just isn't right.

The rest of the chapter, however, was awesome. It almost made me snicker.

LMAO!

I had so much to say about why and how much I loved this story and how many times I laughed out loud (or sniggered into my hand) while reading this story...

But I can't really string those thoughts together right now from thinking about those pick-up-lines and innuendo so I'm just going to say : I love you :)

(for your portrayal of Naruto and Hinata's relationship)

*Fave*

I would fave again but I can't.